Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并使用连接词使内容更连贯。

例: My favourite machine at home is the air conditioner. It helps me stay cool in the hot summer and warm in the cold winter. I think it is very useful because it adjusts the temperature according to my needs.

提案: 回答内容与问题不符，表达混乱且缺乏逻辑。建议直接回答问题，提供具体理由和例子，避免跑题。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save time and effort. For example, my washing machine helps me clean clothes quickly, which is very convenient.

提案: 回答表达不够清晰，语法错误较多。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并使用连接词使内容更流畅。

例: Actually, I usually do not read the instructions because most machines are easy to use. However, if I have difficulties, I search online or ask my mom for help.

提案: 回答较为完整，但表达稍显重复。建议使用更多连接词，丰富词汇，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I believe reading instructions is important, especially for beginners. It helps prevent damage to the machine and ensures correct usage, so I always recommend reading them carefully before use.

× My favorite machine my home is about air condition, it save my life during the whole summer and the cold winter is a magic machine because it can change the winter due to the different needed of the owner.

✓ My favorite machine at my home is the air conditioner; it saves my life during the whole summer, and the cold winter is a magic machine because it can change the winter according to the different needs of the owner.

这里“air condition”应为“air conditioner”，表示空调设备；“save”应为第三人称单数形式“saves”，因为主语是单数“air conditioner”；“needed”应为名词复数“needs”，表示需求。

× My favorite machine my home is about air condition, it save my life during the whole summer and the cold winter is a magic machine because it can change the winter due to the different needed of the owner.

✓ My favorite machine at my home is the air conditioner; it saves my life during the whole summer, and the cold winter is a magic machine because it can change the winter according to the different needs of the owner.

动词“save”应与单数主语“air conditioner”保持一致，使用第三人称单数形式“saves”。

× My favorite machine my home is about air condition, it save my life during the whole summer and the cold winter is a magic machine because it can change the winter due to the different needed of the owner.

✓ My favorite machine at my home is the air conditioner; it saves my life during the whole summer, and the cold winter is a magic machine because it can change the winter according to the different needs of the owner.

“my home is about air condition”中应使用介词“at”表示地点，且“about”用法不当，应改为“at my home”；“due to”改为“according to”更符合表达需求的意思。

× Pricing is very important to washing machines on time.

✓ Pricing is very important for washing machines on time.

“washing machines”复数形式正确，但“Pricing”用法不当，可能想表达“Price”或“Pricing”不合适，建议改为“Price”或重构句子。

× Pricing is very important to washing machines on time.

✓ The price of washing machines is very important.

原句结构不完整且表达不清，需调整句子结构使其更通顺。

× For example for my coffee maker I one times I forgot to clean that about one month and then she appeared a lot of insects and I really dislike that feel so I hope I don't forget that forever.

✓ For example, for my coffee maker, one time I forgot to clean it for about one month, and then a lot of insects appeared; I really disliked that feeling, so I hope I don't forget to clean it again.

“one times”应为“one time”；“she appeared a lot of insects”主语错误，应改为“a lot of insects appeared”；“dislike that feel”应为“disliked that feeling”。

× For example for my coffee maker I one times I forgot to clean that about one month and then she appeared a lot of insects and I really dislike that feel so I hope I don't forget that forever.

✓ For example, for my coffee maker, one time I forgot to clean it for about one month, and then a lot of insects appeared; I really disliked that feeling, so I hope I don't forget to clean it again.

“that”指代不明确，应使用“it”指代“coffee maker”；“she”错误地用作主语，应删除。

× For example for my coffee maker I one times I forgot to clean that about one month and then she appeared a lot of insects and I really dislike that feel so I hope I don't forget that forever.

✓ For example, for my coffee maker, one time I forgot to clean it for about one month, and then a lot of insects appeared; I really disliked that feeling, so I hope I don't forget to clean it again.

“forgot to clean that about one month”中应加介词“for”表示时间段，“for about one month”。

× I will have a say about infrastructure, but most of the time I just search that for on the Google and ask my mom, my mom how to do about that.

✓ I will have a say about infrastructure, but most of the time I just search for that on Google and ask my mom how to do it.

“search that for on the Google”中介词顺序错误，应为“search for that on Google”；“how to do about that”应简化为“how to do it”。

× I will have a say about infrastructure, but most of the time I just search that for on the Google and ask my mom, my mom how to do about that.

✓ I will have a say about infrastructure, but most of the time I just search for that on Google and ask my mom how to do it.

“that”指代不明确，改为“it”更合适；重复“my mom”应删除。

× I think nowadays most of the machines very easily to use, but for sometimes I have really difficult.

✓ I think nowadays most machines are very easy to use, but sometimes I have real difficulties.

“very easily to use”应为“very easy to use”；“for sometimes”应为“sometimes”；“have really difficult”应为“have real difficulties”。

× I think nowadays most of the machines very easily to use, but for sometimes I have really difficult.

✓ I think nowadays most machines are very easy to use, but sometimes I have real difficulties.

“easily”是副词，修饰动词，形容词“easy”修饰名词或补语，此处应用“easy”；“difficult”是形容词，需用名词“difficulties”。

× I will have a say about infrastructure, but most of the time I just search that for on the Google and ask my mom, my mom how to do about that.

✓ I will have a say about infrastructure, but most of the time I just search for that on Google and ask my mom how to do it.

“that”指代不明确，应使用“it”；重复“my mom”应删除。

× I will have a say about infrastructure, but most of the time I just search that for on the Google and ask my mom, my mom how to do about that.

✓ I will have a say about infrastructure, but most of the time I just search for that on Google and ask my mom how to do it.

“search that for on the Google”介词顺序错误，应为“search for that on Google”；“how to do about that”表达不正确，应为“how to do it”。

× Yes, I think it's important especially for the beginners and others, because some of the time they have afraid about damage for the machine and they really don't know how to use that.

✓ Yes, I think it's important especially for beginners and others, because sometimes they are afraid of damaging the machine and really don't know how to use it.

“have afraid”应为“are afraid”；“about damage for the machine”应为“of damaging the machine”；“use that”应为“use it”。

× Yes, I think it's important especially for the beginners and others, because some of the time they have afraid about damage for the machine and they really don't know how to use that.

✓ Yes, I think it's important especially for beginners and others, because sometimes they are afraid of damaging the machine and really don't know how to use it.

“afraid about”应为“afraid of”；“damage for the machine”应为“damaging the machine”。

× So I suggest them to read the instructions firstly, it's more useful.

✓ So I suggest they read the instructions first; it's more useful.

“suggest them to read”结构不正确，应为“suggest they read”；“firstly”改为“first”更自然。