Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your speech more fluent and natural. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. For example, mention the laptop as your favorite machine, then explain why by highlighting its features and how it benefits you both for work and leisure.

例: My favorite machine at home is my laptop because it serves multiple purposes. Firstly, it helps me increase my productivity at work due to its latest features and fast performance. Additionally, during my free time, I enjoy watching movies on it, which makes it very versatile and valuable to me.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by providing more specific examples or reasons. Also, avoid repeating words like 'for' and ensure grammatical accuracy for better clarity.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in today's fast-paced world because they save us a lot of time. For instance, busy working people can rely on these machines to complete household chores quickly, allowing them to focus on their jobs and relax afterward.

提案: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'It gives a barrier.' Instead, provide clear and specific reasons why reading instructions is important, using linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using any machine because they provide important information about how to operate it safely and effectively. Moreover, the manual explains the do's and don'ts, which helps prevent damage to the appliance and ensures proper usage.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and instead provide a concise, well-structured response.

例: Yes, I think reading the instructions is essential because it helps users avoid problems and fully understand the machine's functions. Therefore, whether by reading or watching tutorials, following the manual ensures safe and efficient use.

× Laptop is my favorite machine.

✓ The laptop is my favorite machine.

In English, when referring to a specific object like 'laptop' in a general sense, the definite article 'the' is required before the noun to specify it.

× I use it uh, for both uh, home and work purpose.

✓ I use it, uh, for both home and work purposes.

The phrase 'home and work purpose' is incorrect; 'purposes' should be plural to match 'both', and 'for' is correctly used here. Also, 'home' does not need 'uh' before it.

× It has all the latest features, umm uh, so it improves uh, it gives me a better performance while using and when and during free time I used to watch movies.

✓ It has all the latest features, umm, uh, so it improves, uh, it gives me better performance while using it, and during my free time, I watch movies.

The sentence is awkward and contains unnecessary conjunctions and prepositions. 'A better performance' should be 'better performance' without 'a'. Also, 'used to watch' implies past habit, but the context suggests present habit, so 'watch' is correct. 'When and during free time' is redundant; 'during my free time' suffices.

× Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?

✓ Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?

No correction needed here; the plural form is correctly used.

× It reduces the time we spend and washing and cleaning.

✓ It reduces the time we spend washing and cleaning.

The phrase 'we spend and washing and cleaning' is incorrect. The verb 'spend' should be directly followed by the gerund forms 'washing and cleaning' without 'and' before 'washing'.

× Yes, it's mandatory to read the manual before using any of the appliances because it gives us the overall picture of the machine and the do's and don'ts we need to follow uh.

✓ Yes, it's mandatory to read the manual before using any of the appliances because it gives us an overall picture of the machine and the dos and don'ts we need to follow, uh.

The phrase 'the overall picture' should be 'an overall picture' because it is a general statement. Also, 'do's and don'ts' should be written as 'dos and don'ts' without apostrophe in 'dos'.

× It gives a barrier.

✓ It provides a guideline.

The phrase 'It gives a barrier' is incorrect and unclear. Likely, the intended meaning is that the manual provides guidance or instructions, so 'provides a guideline' is more appropriate.

× It gives a clear picture of how to use it.

✓ It gives a clear picture of how to use it.

No correction needed; the sentence is grammatically correct.

× Yes, I believe it's crucial to go through the manual and read all the instructions given to eliminate any issues and to understand how exactly the machine works.

✓ Yes, I believe it's crucial to go through the manual and read all the instructions given to eliminate any issues and to understand exactly how the machine works.

The phrase 'how exactly the machine works' is better phrased as 'exactly how the machine works' for natural English word order.

× It is always good to watch or read the manuals before using it.

✓ It is always good to watch or read the manuals before using them.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'manuals' which is plural, so the correct pronoun is 'them'.