Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and making the response more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'I just have a piece of machine which can make sandwiches,' say 'I only have a sandwich maker at home.' Also, clarify the connection between making sandwiches and having energy for the day.

例: My favourite machine at home is my sandwich maker because it is very convenient. Every morning, I use it to make an omelette quickly, which helps me start the day with enough energy.

提案: Your answer addresses the question well but could be improved by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to make your points clearer and avoid filler words like 'uh.' Also, be more specific about how these machines help people.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save us a lot of time. Since many people have busy schedules, these machines allow us to finish chores quickly and spend more quality time with our families. They are especially helpful for people who live alone.

提案: Your answer is honest but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to organize your ideas logically and use correct grammar. Avoid informal phrases like 'gonna' and unclear words like 'teeters.'

例: I usually do not read the instructions carefully before using a machine. Instead, I try to use it first, and if I encounter problems, I search online or ask my friends for help because sometimes the instructions are difficult to understand.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs clearer sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words like 'like.' Be more concise and precise in your explanation.

例: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because they provide important details on how to use the machine safely. This helps prevent damage and allows you to use the machine more effectively.

× I love that because of it's convenience.

✓ I love that because of its convenience.

The pronoun 'it's' is a contraction for 'it is' or 'it has', but here the possessive pronoun 'its' is needed to show possession. Using 'it's' is incorrect in this context.

× since I bought that one I could make an omelette easily.

✓ since I bought that one I can make an omelette easily.

The modal verb 'could' implies past ability, but the sentence refers to a present ability after purchase. 'Can' is the correct modal verb to express present ability.

× The definitely help us a lot in our today's life.

✓ They definitely help us a lot in our daily life.

The pronoun 'The' is incorrect; it should be 'They' to refer to plural machines. Also, 'our today's life' is awkward; 'our daily life' is more natural.

× Because of our hectic schedule, we don't have enough time to rest.

✓ Because of our hectic schedules, we don't have enough time to rest.

The plural 'schedules' better matches the general statement about multiple people's busy lives. Also, the sentence is correct but could be improved for clarity.

× So instead of spending hours doing household chores, we have more time for ourselves, for our family and uh, during household chores are no longer a fear of every individual, particularly those who are living alone.

✓ So instead of spending hours doing household chores, we have more time for ourselves and our family, and household chores are no longer a fear for individuals, particularly those who live alone.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains awkward phrasing. 'During household chores are no longer a fear' is incorrect; it should be 'household chores are no longer a fear'. Also, 'those who are living alone' is better as 'those who live alone' for simplicity.

× I don't often do it for me, I'm not such a careful person.

✓ I don't often do it myself; I'm not such a careful person.

The phrase 'do it for me' is incorrect here; the reflexive pronoun 'myself' is appropriate to indicate the subject performs the action on themselves.

× I will not read everything carefully till it has some problems.

✓ I will not read everything carefully until it has some problems.

The word 'till' is informal; 'until' is more appropriate in formal speech. Also, the sentence is acceptable but 'until' improves clarity.

× Yeah because the instruction is teeters and there were the I mean like I cannot understand what is said.

✓ Yeah, because the instructions are unclear and there were times I couldn't understand what was said.

'Instruction is teeters' is incorrect; 'instructions are unclear' is correct. Also, 'there were the' is incorrect; 'there were times' is appropriate. The sentence needed restructuring for clarity.

× So it much easier for me to ask someone like my roommates or my friends.

✓ So it's much easier for me to ask someone like my roommates or my friends.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' contracted as 'it's'. Without it, the sentence is incomplete.

× Yeah, I've been quite important because it kind of provides you with information with details that you need to be careful when you use the machine and you can prevent it from being broken or you can like use it much more effective way that you may not know if you haven't done the instruction reading.

✓ Yeah, it's quite important because it provides you with detailed information that you need to be careful when you use the machine, and you can prevent it from breaking or use it in a much more effective way that you may not know if you haven't read the instructions.

The original sentence has pronoun misuse and awkward phrasing. 'I've been quite important' should be 'it's quite important'. 'Prevent it from being broken' is better as 'prevent it from breaking'. 'Instruction reading' should be 'read the instructions'. The sentence was restructured for clarity and correctness.