Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Verbessern Sie die Grammatik und Satzstruktur, insbesondere die Zeitformen und den Satzbau. Verwenden Sie klarere und präzisere Ausdrücke, um Ihre Gedanken natürlicher und flüssiger auszudrücken.

例: My favorite machine at home is my PlayStation 5. I bought it two weeks ago on Black Friday, and it is really impressive. The graphics are much better compared to the PlayStation 4.

提案: Achten Sie auf die korrekte Verwendung von Singular und Plural sowie auf die Verbindung der Sätze mit passenden Bindewörtern, um den Text flüssiger und logischer zu gestalten.

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important for a household because they reduce the amount of cleaning work. Moreover, the results of a washing machine are incredible since clothes are much cleaner than when washed by hand.

提案: Verbessern Sie die Grammatik, insbesondere die Verwendung von Singular und Plural, und strukturieren Sie den Satz klarer. Verwenden Sie verbindende Wörter, um die Ideen logisch zu verknüpfen.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine so that I can understand all its functions. Also, since some machines have different functional buttons, I want to avoid using them incorrectly and possibly damaging the machine.

提案: Verbessern Sie die Grammatik und Satzstruktur, insbesondere die Verwendung von Artikeln und Pluralformen. Verwenden Sie außerdem passende Bindewörter, um die Antwort flüssiger zu gestalten.

例: Yes, I think reading the instructions is very important because it helps you understand all the functions of the machine and which buttons perform specific tasks. Additionally, reading the instructions can prevent mistakes and avoid damaging the machine.

× I get it two weeks ago on Black Friday and it is really, really cool.

✓ I got it two weeks ago on Black Friday and it is really, really cool.

The verb 'get' should be in the past tense 'got' because the action happened two weeks ago, which is in the past.

× The graphic is you can compare it to PlayStation 4.

✓ The graphics can be compared to PlayStation 4.

'Graphic' should be plural 'graphics' because it refers to the visual elements collectively. Also, the sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× Yes, I think washing machine and sweeping machine are very important for a household because they can reduce one's cleaning job.

✓ Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important for a household because they can reduce one's cleaning job.

Both 'washing machine' and 'sweeping machine' should be plural to match the plural verb 'are' and refer to the general category of machines.

× And also the result of a washing machine is incredible.

✓ And also the results of a washing machine are incredible.

'Result' should be plural 'results' because it refers to the outcomes of using the machine, and the verb should agree in number.

× It's much cleaner than hand washed.

✓ It's much cleaner than hand washing.

'Hand washed' is incorrect here; 'hand washing' is the correct noun form to compare with machine washing.

× Yes, I will read the instruction before using a machine so I can get to know all the possible function of the machine and also some machine they have a different functional button so I don't want to get it wrong and maybe destroy the machine.

✓ Yes, I will read the instructions before using a machine so I can get to know all the possible functions of the machine, and also some machines have different functional buttons, so I don't want to get it wrong and maybe destroy the machine.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' because it refers to multiple steps or guidelines. 'Function' should be plural 'functions' to match 'all the possible'. 'Some machine they have' is incorrect; it should be 'some machines have'. 'Button' should be plural 'buttons' to match 'different'.

× Yes, I think to read the instruction is very important because you get to know all the function of the machine and what button that perform a specific task.

✓ Yes, I think reading the instructions is very important because you get to know all the functions of the machine and which buttons perform specific tasks.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'Function' should be plural 'functions'. 'Button' should be plural 'buttons'. Also, 'to read' is better as 'reading' here for natural expression.

× Also reading the instruction can prevent you from making mistake or damaging the machine.

✓ Also, reading the instructions can prevent you from making mistakes or damaging the machine.

A comma is needed after 'Also' for correct conjunction use. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'Mistake' should be plural 'mistakes' to match the context.