Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'vacuuming cleaner' nên là 'vacuum cleaner', và 'scrap my house' nên là 'clean my house'. Bạn cũng nên tránh lặp lại ý và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng các từ vựng phù hợp và câu có cấu trúc đúng.

例: My favourite machine at home is the vacuum cleaner because it helps me clean the floors quickly and efficiently. I use it regularly when doing housework, and it makes the task much easier.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'scraping machine' nên là 'sweeping machine' hoặc 'vacuum cleaner'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh nói lắp và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác.

例: I think washing machines are more important than sweeping machines because even if we don't have a sweeping machine, we can still clean manually. However, washing machines save a lot of time and effort when doing laundry.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều từ ngữ không phù hợp và lặp lại nhiều lần từ 'uh'. Câu 'I'm Cardi Persian' không rõ nghĩa và gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh sử dụng từ không chính xác hoặc không cần thiết.

例: Actually, I usually don't read the instructions because I prefer to learn by trying. I find it easy to figure out how to use new machines on my own.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn chưa hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'read instruction' nên là 'read the instructions'. Bạn nên nói rõ hơn về lý do và tránh để câu bị bỏ dở, đồng thời sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because it helps us use the machine correctly and avoid mistakes. Otherwise, we might damage the machine or use it inefficiently.

× Well, I would say is vacuuming cleaner and that's really functional for me when doing household job.

✓ Well, I would say it is a vacuum cleaner and that's really functional for me when doing household jobs.

The phrase 'vacuuming cleaner' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'vacuum cleaner'. Also, 'doing household job' should be pluralized to 'doing household jobs' to indicate general tasks. Additionally, the sentence is missing the subject 'it' after 'would say'.

× Whenever I do my housework, I usually use vacuuming cleaner to scrap my house and that's make my house.

✓ Whenever I do my housework, I usually use a vacuum cleaner to scrape my house and that makes my house clean.

The verb 'scrap' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'scrape'. However, 'scrape my house' is not idiomatic; likely, the intended meaning is 'clean my house'. Also, 'vacuuming cleaner' should be 'vacuum cleaner'. The phrase 'that's make my house' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'that makes my house clean' or similar. The article 'a' is missing before 'vacuum cleaner'.

× Where I think washing machines is important than scraping machine because if we not have scraping machine in my home, we still can do on my own.

✓ Well, I think washing machines are more important than scraping machines because if we do not have a scraping machine in my home, we can still do it on our own.

The subject 'washing machines' is plural and should be paired with the plural verb 'are'. 'Scraping machine' should be pluralized to 'scraping machines' to match 'washing machines'. The phrase 'if we not have' is incorrect; it should be 'if we do not have'. Also, 'we still can do on my own' is incorrect; it should be 'we can still do it on our own'.

× But washing machine help me a lot when uh.

✓ But the washing machine helps me a lot.

The singular noun 'washing machine' requires the third person singular verb 'helps'. The sentence is incomplete and should end properly. The article 'the' is needed before 'washing machine'.

× Uh, actually, no, because I'm Cardi Persian who lets everything around me happen naturally.

✓ Uh, actually, no, because I'm a carefree person who lets everything around me happen naturally.

'Cardi Persian' is likely a mishearing or misspelling of 'carefree person'. The article 'a' is needed before 'carefree person'.

× So when I, uh, use a machine in first time, I just, uh, do it and use it easily, uh, without instruction because I'm good at.

✓ So when I use a machine for the first time, I just do it and use it easily without instructions because I'm good at it.

The phrase 'in first time' should be 'for the first time'. The sentence is missing the object after 'good at'; it should be 'good at it'. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to general guidance.

× I think yes, because when we read instruction we can uh, use machine correctly and without error.

✓ I think yes, because when we read instructions, we can use the machine correctly and without errors.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. The article 'the' is needed before 'machine'. 'Error' should be plural 'errors' to match the context.

× So if we not read instructions that bring many drawbacks and can lead to.

✓ So if we do not read instructions, that brings many drawbacks and can lead to problems.

The phrase 'if we not read' is incorrect; it should be 'if we do not read'. The verb 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'that'. The sentence is incomplete and should end with an object, e.g., 'problems'.