Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has several pronunciation and grammar errors that affect clarity, such as 'femur February machine' instead of 'favourite machine' and 'feed complete' instead of 'complete'. Try to speak more clearly and use correct grammar. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and add specific details about why you like the laptop.

例: My favourite machine at home is my laptop, which I bought in 2019 during the pandemic. I use it to complete various projects and assignments. It helps me stay productive and connected, so I really like it.

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some pronunciation errors like 'souping machine' instead of 'sweeping machine'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Adding more specific reasons or examples would improve your answer.

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are essential for housekeeping. Although I don't use the sweeping machine very often, I use the washing machine several times a day. This appliance really changes my daily routine by saving time and effort.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes that make it hard to understand. Avoid repeating words and filler sounds. Try to express your ideas clearly and logically, for example, explain why you don't read instructions and the consequences of that behavior.

例: No, I usually don't read the instructions because I feel lazy. However, this sometimes causes me to use the machines incorrectly and even damage them.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but there are some grammar mistakes such as 'reading instruction' instead of 'reading instructions' and 'potential mistake' instead of 'potential mistakes'. Try to use plural forms correctly and add linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because it can help avoid potential mistakes when operating a new machine. Moreover, it allows you to discover all the features and functions the machine offers.

× My femur February machine in my home is my laptop I bought in in 2019 uh, during the pandemic when I was in the US uh, I used this laptop uh, to feed complete many different kind of project and tests.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is my laptop I bought in 2019 during the pandemic when I was in the US. I used this laptop to complete many different kinds of projects and tests.

The phrase 'many different kind of project and tests' contains singular 'kind' with plural 'project and tests', which is incorrect. It should be 'many different kinds of projects and tests' to match plural nouns with plural quantifiers. Also, 'feed complete' is incorrect and should be 'to complete'. Additionally, 'femur February machine' seems to be a mishearing or typo and corrected to 'favorite machine'.

× Yes, I think washing machine and sweeping machine are essential for housekeeping.

✓ Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are essential for housekeeping.

When referring to general categories, plural forms 'washing machines' and 'sweeping machines' are appropriate to indicate all such machines, not just one. Using singular forms here is incorrect.

× Uh, I actually have one washing machine and one souping machine.

✓ Uh, I actually have one washing machine and one sweeping machine.

The word 'souping' is a typo and should be 'sweeping'. The singular forms are correct here because the speaker refers to one of each machine.

× I didn't use sweeping machine that often, but I use washing machine, uh, several times in a day and I think that's really a game changer for my routine.

✓ I don't use the sweeping machine that often, but I use the washing machine several times a day and I think that's really a game changer for my routine.

The singular nouns 'sweeping machine' and 'washing machine' need definite articles 'the' when referring to specific machines the speaker owns. Also, 'didn't use' is past tense but context suggests present habitual action, so 'don't use' is correct. 'In a day' should be 'a day' without 'in'.

× No, I don't. I think that's not good for uh, using new products, but I just, I was too lazy to read them, but sometimes because my laziness I operated a machine run so and also damaged them.

✓ No, I don't. I think that's not good when using new products, but I was too lazy to read them. Sometimes because of my laziness, I operated a machine incorrectly and also damaged it.

The phrase 'not good for using' should be 'not good when using' to express the condition properly. 'I operated a machine run so' is unclear and corrected to 'operated a machine incorrectly'. Also, 'damaged them' changed to 'damaged it' because 'machine' is singular.

× Yes, I think so. I think reading instruction can avoid potential mistake when you operate a new product or a machine and also that can help you to discover all the potential and functions the machine has.

✓ Yes, I think so. I think reading instructions can avoid potential mistakes when you operate a new product or a machine, and it can also help you discover all the potential functions the machine has.

'Reading instruction' should be plural 'reading instructions' because instructions are usually multiple. 'Potential mistake' should be plural 'potential mistakes' to match the general sense. 'Help you to discover' is better as 'help you discover' for natural phrasing. 'Potential and functions' corrected to 'potential functions' for clarity.