Machine— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
What is your favourite machine in your home?
受験者
Well, I would say is washing machine because, uh, thanks to washing machine, I, uh, everything in my home is really, uh, finished perfectly and really convenient for member in my family. That's bring to me many advantages.
試験官
Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?
受験者
Yeah, absolutely. Washing machine is really important in my life, but I think swapping machine is less crucial because without swapping machine, I still, I still, uh, can finish my household job easily.
試験官
Do you read the instructions before using a machine?
受験者
Not really, because when I receive a new machine I will embark on my housework rather than read the instruction before using it, because without the instruction I still easily do it and finish it perfectly.
試験官
Do you think it is important to read the instructions?
受験者
It depends because with the person who not ability to use something new I think is really important to read the instruction. But for me without the instruction I still easily do it and I think it's not important for me.
評価
総合
Part 1
What is your favourite machine in your home?
スコア: 58.0提案: Cải thiện sự rõ ràng và ngữ pháp: Tránh lặp từ, filler (uh) và sửa cấu trúc câu để tự nhiên hơn. Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tiết kiệm thời gian, làm sạch hiệu quả) và kết luận ngắn gọn. Luyện phát âm từ như "washing machine" và ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'That's bring' → 'That brings').
例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine. It saves me a lot of time by washing clothes quickly and thoroughly, so my family always has clean clothes. For example, I can finish laundry in one hour instead of spending the whole afternoon doing it by hand.
Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?
スコア: 62.0提案: Cải thiện từ vựng chính xác và liên kết ý: Tránh nhầm lẫn từ ("swapping" → "sweeping"), giảm lặp và dùng liên từ để kết nối lý do, ví dụ: 'however' hoặc 'but'. Thêm một lý do cụ thể vì sao máy quét kém quan trọng (ví dụ: công việc có thể làm thủ công).
例: Yes, I think washing machines are essential because they handle large loads quickly and clean clothes better than hand-washing. However, sweeping machines are less crucial for me since I can sweep small areas by hand easily, especially in a small flat.
Do you read the instructions before using a machine?
スコア: 55.0提案: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và logic: Tránh lặp câu nguyên nhân hai lần, sử dụng từ chính xác ('start' thay cho 'embark on') và nêu thêm ví dụ khi cần. Có thể nói khi bạn sẽ đọc hướng dẫn (ví dụ: cho thiết bị phức tạp).
例: Not usually. When I get a new machine I usually start using it straight away because most functions are intuitive. For example, with my washing machine the basic settings are simple, so I rarely read the manual unless there is a problem.
Do you think it is important to read the instructions?
スコア: 60.0提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt ý chính: Sử dụng cấu trúc rõ ràng ("It depends. For inexperienced users..."), tránh lỗi ngữ pháp ("who not ability" → "who are not able" hoặc "who are inexperienced"). Nên đưa ví dụ cụ thể khi nên đọc hướng dẫn (ví dụ: thiết bị điện tử phức tạp).
例: It depends. For inexperienced users it is important to read the instructions to avoid mistakes or damage. Personally, I usually skip the manual for simple appliances, but I would read it for a new, complex device like a microwave with many functions.
文法
× Well, I would say is washing machine because, uh, thanks to washing machine, I, uh, everything in my home is really, uh, finished perfectly and really convenient for member in my family.
✓ Well, I would say the washing machine because, thanks to the washing machine, everything in my home is done perfectly and it is really convenient for members of my family.
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