Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中注意流利度與減少填充詞（如"umm","uh"），並使用更直接的主題句開始。擴展細節時用連接詞使句子更連貫，例如說明原因時可用"because"或"so"，並提供一兩個具體例子（如具體溫度或使用時間）。句子不要過長，最多5句。

例: My favourite machine at home is the air conditioner because it keeps my bedroom comfortable in both summer and winter. For example, it cools the room to about 24°C in hot weather so I can concentrate while studying. It also helps me sleep better by maintaining a steady temperature at night.

提案: 注意發音和單詞選擇（把"sweating"改為"sweeping"），並提供更完整的理由與連接詞。開頭可直接回答Yes/No，再用because或for example展開說明，並提供具體情境如養寵物或有小孩。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save a lot of time. For example, a sweeping robot can pick up pet hair and dust every day, so you don’t need to sweep the floor manually.

提案: 在否定回答後要給出清晰原因並用正確的語法（例如"the instructions are"），避免語法錯誤。可補充偶爾會看簡短說明或求助他人，並用連接詞如"because"或"so"使表達連貫。

例: Not usually. I seldom read the full manual because the instructions are often long and complicated, so I prefer to look up a quick online video or ask someone for help.

提案: 回答時避免使用矛盾或多餘的連接詞（例如"although"和"but"同用），先給出直接立場，然後解釋原因並描述具體行動（何時會查看、如何查找資訊）。保持句子簡潔且有邏輯連接。

例: Definitely. Reading the instructions is important because it helps you use the machine safely and avoid damage. If a device breaks, I usually check the manual first or search online for troubleshooting steps before trying to fix it myself.

× I mean, it must be my air conditioner, umm, because it's, uh, keeps my bedroom comfortable during hot summer and cold winter.

✓ I mean, it must be my air conditioner, umm, because it keeps my bedroom comfortable during hot summers and cold winters.

错误类型：现在时态和名词复数使用不当。说明：原句中"it's, uh, keeps"中同时使用了缩写"it is"和动词第三人称单数形式"keeps"造成冗余，应仅使用"it keeps"或"it's keeping"（后者表示进行时）。此外，季节应使用复数形式表示经常发生的情况，应改为"hot summers and cold winters"。建议：去掉多余的"is"，保持动词为一般现在时，表示习惯性动作。同时将季节名词改为复数。

× Sweating machines are important too. If you have a cat who or long hair it can help you clean the floor.

✓ Sweeping machines are important too. If you have a cat or long hair, they can help you clean the floor.

错误类型：代词使用不当和单词拼写错误。说明：原句"Sweating machines"应为"sweeping machines"（清扫用的机器）。"If you have a cat who or long hair"结构混乱，"who"用于指人或动物从句，但后面接"or long hair"不合适。主句主语是"machines"，代词应为复数"they"而不是单数"it"。建议：修正拼写，将条件并列改为"a cat or long hair"不太自然，建议改为"a cat or long hair"可改为"a cat or a lot of long hair"但更自然为"If you have a cat or a lot of long hair"；这里我保留原意并统一代词为复数。

× Not really. I seldom try to read it because I think it's instructions are really complex.

✓ Not really. I seldom try to read them because I think the instructions are really complex.

错误类型：现在时态/代词与名词不一致和冠词使用错误。说明："instructions"是复数，指代时应使用复数代词"them"而不是单数"it"。另外，"it's instructions"意图使用所有格，正确应为"the instructions"或"its instructions"（如果指某台机器的说明书）。原句混用了"it's"和复数名词，造成语法错误。建议：使用复数代词"them"来指代"instructions"，并用定冠词或适当的物主代词明确指代。

× Definitely, although I don't often read instructions, but I will check it and try to fix my machine when it breaks down.

✓ Definitely. Although I don't often read instructions, I will check them and try to fix my machine when it breaks down.

错误类型：句子结构和连接词使用不当。说明：原句同时使用了"although"和"but"，造成冗余且结构混乱。应使用从句连接词"Although... , ..."或用"but"连接两独立句子。另有代词与先行词不一致，"instructions"为复数，应用"them"而不是"it"。建议：去掉重复的连接词，使用正确的指代形式，保持句子流畅。