Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, add a specific reason and an example, and avoid vague phrases. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves a lot of time on laundry. For example, it can wash a full load in under an hour, so I don’t have to spend hours hand-washing. As a result, I can use that time for studying or relaxing.

提案: Avoid hesitation and improve sentence structure. Give a direct topic sentence, then explain with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (for example, therefore) and remove filler words like 'uh'.

例: Yes, I believe washing and sweeping machines are very important, especially for people with limited mobility. For example, elderly or disabled individuals can maintain a clean home without heavy physical effort. Therefore, these machines greatly improve their independence and quality of life.

提案: Make the response more concise and add a brief specific detail about what you learn from instructions. Use a linking phrase to connect the reason to an example.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because they explain safe operation and settings. For instance, the manual tells me which cycle to choose for delicate clothes, which prevents damage.

提案: Be more specific and avoid repetition. Provide a clear reason and a concrete example of a benefit (safety, efficiency). Use linking words and finish the sentence clearly.

例: Yes, I think reading instructions is essential for safety and efficiency. For example, the instructions often warn about risks and recommend the correct settings, which prevents accidents and ensures the product works well.

× In my home, washing machine is my favorite because it is very convenient for us to wash clothes.

✓ In my home, the washing machine is my favorite because it is very convenient for us to wash clothes.

Missing definite article 'the' before a specific singular countable noun 'washing machine'. Use 'the' when referring to a specific appliance in the home. Suggestion: include 'the' before singular household appliance names when speaking about a particular item.

× Yes, I think these machines are very important for those who are not able to do the work with uh, to do the work physically.

✓ Yes, I think these machines are very important for those who are not able to do the work physically.

Redundant phrase 'to do the work' repeated and filler 'with uh' interrupts the sentence. Remove repetition and fillers to make the pronoun reference clear. Suggestion: say 'not able to do the work physically' to express inability clearly.

× Yes, I always try to read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me to know about the machine how to use it.

✓ Yes, I always try to read the instructions before using a machine because they help me know how to use it.

Incorrect article use and awkward word order. 'The instructions' or 'instructions' are plural so use 'they' instead of 'it helps me'. Also 'know about the machine how to use it' is incorrect order. Suggestion: use plural pronoun 'they' and the structure 'help me know how to use it.'

× Yes, in my opinion, it is very essential to read the instructions before using a product.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, it is essential to read the instructions before using a product.

Word 'very' with 'essential' is not grammatically wrong but can be wordy; more natural to use 'essential' alone. This is style rather than strict grammar, but adjustment improves fluency. Suggestion: omit 'very' with strong adjectives like 'essential.'

× Sometimes we don't know how to use the product or machine.

✓ Sometimes we don't know how to use a product or a machine.

Parallel structure requires consistent articles: use 'a product or a machine' or 'the product or the machine' depending on context. Original mixes 'the product or machine' which is acceptable but less consistent. Suggestion: keep articles parallel for clarity.

× By reading the instructions, we can analyze the instructions and can use the product very.

✓ By reading the instructions, we can understand them and use the product properly.

Awkward repetition 'analyze the instructions' followed by 'can use the product very' which is incomplete and ungrammatical. Replace 'analyze the instructions' with 'understand them' and 'use the product properly' to convey intended meaning. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same noun and use appropriate adverb 'properly.'