Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail or reason using a linking word. Avoid repeating words like “wash” twice and correct small grammar (add articles).

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time. For example, instead of hand-washing, I can do several loads at once, which is especially helpful on busy mornings.

提案: Improve fluency and clarity. Remove fillers (“uh”) and restructure the sentence: give a direct answer, then a concise reason with a linking word and a specific example or comparison. Use correct phrasing like “physically” and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I think they are very important because they help people who have limited physical strength. For instance, elderly people can keep their homes clean without strenuous effort when they use robotic sweepers or an automatic washer.

提案: Make the sentence more natural and reduce redundancy. Give a brief reason after a clear topic sentence and add a specific detail about what you check in the instructions.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because they tell me how to operate it safely. For example, I check recommended settings, safety warnings, and maintenance tips to avoid damage.

提案: Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. Answer directly, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Be careful with word choice (e.g., “analyze the instructions” is awkward) and finish the idea clearly.

例: Yes, I believe it is essential because instructions explain proper use and safety precautions. For example, reading the manual can prevent misuse, extend the product’s lifespan, and reduce the risk of accidents.

× In my home, washing machine is my favorite because it is very convenient for us to wash clothes.

✓ In my home, the washing machine is my favorite because it is very convenient for us to wash clothes.

The noun 'washing machine' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific appliance in the speaker's home. Use 'the' before singular countable nouns when both speaker and listener understand which item is meant. Suggestion: add 'the' before 'washing machine'.

× Yes, I think these machines are very important for those who are not able to do the work with uh, to do the work physically.

✓ Yes, I think these machines are very important for those who are not able to do the work physically.

The phrase contains a redundant and awkward repetition 'to do the work with uh, to do the work physically.' Remove the repeated segment. Also, 'do the work physically' is clear; no additional preposition needed. Suggestion: delete the repeated words for clarity.

× Yes, I always try to read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me to know about the machine how to use it.

✓ Yes, I always try to read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me know how to use the machine.

Word order and preposition use are incorrect: 'helps me to know about the machine how to use it' is ungrammatical. Use 'helps me know how to use the machine' (no 'about', and place 'how to use the machine' after 'know'). Also 'helps me know' is more natural than 'helps me to know' though both are possible. Suggestion: remove 'about' and reorder clause.

× By reading the instructions, we can analyze the instructions and can use the product very.

✓ By reading the instructions, we can understand them and use the product correctly.

The sentence repeats 'instructions' and uses 'analyze' and 'very' incorrectly. 'Analyze the instructions' is possible but awkward here; 'understand them' is clearer. 'Use the product very' is incomplete; an adverb like 'correctly' is required. Suggestion: avoid repetition and choose the correct adverb 'correctly'.

× Yes, in my opinion, it is very essential to read the instructions before using a product.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, it is essential to read the instructions before using a product.

'Very essential' is stylistically weak and often considered incorrect because 'essential' already expresses necessity; intensifier 'very' is unnecessary. Better to use 'absolutely essential' if emphasis is needed. Suggestion: remove 'very' or replace with stronger modifier like 'absolutely'.