Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar errors (e.g., "my favorite machine is the vacuum cleaner," "I use it several times a week"). Avoid redundancy like "keeps my home clean and neat" — choose one adjective.

例: My favourite machine at home is the vacuum cleaner because it quickly removes dust and pet hair. I use it several times a week, especially on weekends, so my living room stays tidy and hygienic.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then support with specific reasons and a linking phrase. Fix grammar (e.g., plural agreement and word choice: 'sweeping machines' → 'sweepers' or 'vacuum cleaners'). Complete your sentence and avoid fillers like 'uh.'

例: Yes, I think both washing machines and vacuum cleaners are important. For example, washing machines save time and ensure clothes are hygienic, while vacuum cleaners remove dust and allergens, improving indoor air quality.

提案: Keep the answer direct and correct the unclear phrase 'unwanted sites' (probably 'accidents' or 'problems'). Remove fillers and use a linking word to explain the reason. Use correct verb forms and natural phrasing.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me operate it safely and avoid accidents. For instance, reading the manual taught me how to set the washing cycle properly and prevent damage to clothes.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to give a clear reason and a specific example. Correct grammar and finish the thought (e.g., 'keep machines working well' or 'prevent damage').

例: Yes, I think reading instructions is essential because it prevents misuse and prolongs the machine's life. For example, following the care guidelines for my blender has kept it working well for years.

× In my home my favorite machine is the vacuum cleaner because it keeps my home clean and neat and also it's very essential and usually I use this machine in several times a week.

✓ In my home, my favorite machine is the vacuum cleaner because it keeps my home clean and neat. It is also very essential, and I usually use this machine several times a week.

Errors and fixes: 1) Run-on sentence: original combines many ideas without proper separation; split into two sentences for clarity (Sentence structure error mapped to Article errors ID per list: use ID 22). 2) Unnecessary article/phrase 'in several times a week' is incorrect; use 'several times a week'. 3) Contraction 'it's' changed to 'It is' for formality and clarity. Suggestion: break long sentences into shorter ones, remove extra prepositions before time expressions, and keep consistent subject references. Use commas after introductory phrases like 'In my home,'.

× If I talk about myself, washing machine as well as sweeping machines is highly crucial in various ways, such as, uh, washing machine can clean our clothes and sweeping machines are clean our.

✓ If I talk about myself, the washing machine as well as the sweeping machine are highly crucial in various ways; for example, the washing machine can clean our clothes and the sweeping machine can clean our floors.

Errors and fixes: 1) Missing definite articles before nouns ('the washing machine', 'the sweeping machine'). 2) Subject-verb agreement: compound subject connected by 'as well as' usually takes singular verb if second is parenthetical, but here meaning is plural, so use 'are'. 3) Incorrect verb form 'are clean our' and missing 'can' auxiliary: corrected to 'can clean our floors'. Suggestion: include articles for specific machines, ensure verbs agree with the intended subject number, and use correct verb phrase order (modal + base verb). ID used: 27.

× Definitely. I always read the instructions before using a machine because, uh, I guess learning all instructions can make easy to use any machine, otherwise it can cause some unwanted sites.

✓ Definitely. I always read the instructions before using a machine because I think learning all the instructions can make it easy to use any machine; otherwise it can cause some unwanted incidents.

Errors and fixes: 1) Missing article 'the' before 'instructions'. 2) Incorrect word order 'can make easy to use' changed to 'can make it easy to use' (sentence structure). 3) Wrong noun 'sites' likely intended 'incidents' or 'problems'. Suggestion: include necessary articles, place objects and pronouns (it) correctly after 'make', and choose the correct noun to convey meaning. ID used: 6.

× From my perspective, definitely it is very much crucial to read the instructions before using a machine because it helps us to use easily these machines by learning some instructions and also keep machines uh.

✓ From my perspective, it is definitely crucial to read the instructions before using a machine because it helps us to use these machines easily by learning the instructions and also to keep the machines in good condition.

Errors and fixes: 1) Word order and adverb placement: 'definitely it is very much crucial' changed to 'it is definitely crucial'. 2) Adverb placement 'use easily these machines' corrected to 'use these machines easily'. 3) Missing articles 'the instructions' and 'the machines'. 4) Incomplete clause 'and also keep machines uh' completed to 'and also to keep the machines in good condition'. Suggestion: place adverbs near the verb they modify, use articles for specific nouns, and finish clauses with clear nouns/phrases. ID used: 6.