Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, concise topic sentence naming one or two favourite machines, then add 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and finish your sentence. Work on grammar (articles, verb forms) and fluency to sound natural.

例: My favourite machines at home are the air conditioner and my computer. The air conditioner keeps the rooms cool and comfortable in hot summers, so I can sleep and work well; meanwhile, my computer helps me study and communicate with friends online.

提案: Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give specific reasons linked logically. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'vacuum cleaner' not 'sweeping machine') and avoid unclear phrases. Use one or two clear reasons and an example if needed.

例: Yes, I definitely think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are essential. For example, a washing machine saves a lot of time and ensures clothes are hygienic, while a vacuum cleaner makes it easy to remove dust and pet hair from carpets.

提案: Answer directly, then explain the condition clearly using linking words (e.g. 'if', 'when', 'because'). Correct word choice: 'instructions' and 'assemble'. Keep sentences short and finish thoughts to improve coherence.

例: I usually read the instructions if a machine needs assembly or has complex functions. However, for simple devices like a basic fan, I typically do not read the manual because they are straightforward to use.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then provide specific reasons with linking words. Use correct grammar (e.g. 'reading the instructions is important', 'you need to read them'). Avoid leaving sentences unfinished.

例: Yes, reading the instructions is important because it helps you use the machine safely and avoids damage. For instance, following the manual for a washing machine prevents misuse and prolongs its lifespan.

× Let me think my favorite machine is air conditioner and computer.

✓ Let me think: my favorite machines are the air conditioner and the computer.

Run-on and article/plural issues: The original lacks punctuation and uses singular nouns where plural is required. Use a colon or pause after 'Let me think', use plural 'machines' because two items are listed, and add definite article 'the' for specific household items. Suggestion: separate clauses with punctuation and ensure noun number and articles match context.

× You know air conditioner can make people feel comfortable and if you very hot in summer, you can take take take it.

✓ You know the air conditioner can make people feel comfortable, and if you are very hot in summer, you can turn it on.

Missing article and verb 'be' for second clause, and wrong verb 'take'. The air conditioner needs 'the' before it; use 'are' for 'you are very hot'; and 'turn it on' is the correct collocation for operating an air conditioner. Also remove repeated filler words.

× In addition, I like computer because.

✓ In addition, I like the computer because it helps me study and work.

Fragment: 'because' requires a following clause explaining the reason. Add 'the' and complete the sentence with a reason appropriate to context.

× And definitely, I think washing machine and swapping machine are essential because, uh, if you, if you rain a cat or dogs, you, you need to washing machine, uh, especially air conditioner the, the animals that makes.

✓ Definitely, I think the washing machine and the vacuum cleaner are essential because, for example, if you have a cat or dog, you need a washing machine to clean clothes and a vacuum cleaner to remove pet hair.

Multiple problems: wrong appliance name 'swapping machine' should be 'vacuum cleaner', missing articles 'the' and 'a', incorrect phrase 'if you rain a cat or dogs' should be 'if you have a cat or dog', incorrect verb form 'need to washing machine' should be 'need a washing machine', and the final clause is unclear. Provide clear, corrected sentence with appropriate articles and noun forms.

× Do you read the instructions before using a machine?

✓ Do you read the instructions before using a machine?

This question sentence is grammatically correct as written and fits the simple present tense for habitual actions. No change needed.

× Uh, if that machine need required requires a machine assembly, I I will read the institution before using machine.

✓ If that machine requires assembly, I will read the instructions before using it.

Mixed and redundant verbs: use single correct verb 'requires' for third-person singular. 'Machine assembly' phrasing is awkward; 'requires assembly' is natural. 'Institution' is incorrect word; use 'instructions'. Add object pronoun 'it' and remove duplicate 'I'.

× But if I use a simple machine, I think I don't need to read the in institution.

✓ But if I use a simple machine, I think I don't need to read the instructions.

Wrong article and wrong noun: 'the in institution' is garbled. Use plural 'instructions' without 'the' for general meaning. Keep contraction consistent.

× So I think.

✓ So I think it's unnecessary to read them in that case.

Fragment: 'So I think.' is incomplete. Provide a full clause explaining the thought, matching prior sentence context.

× I think read the instruction is essential and important.

✓ I think reading the instructions is essential and important.

Use gerund 'reading' as subject of the sentence rather than base verb 'read'. Use plural 'instructions' for general guidance. This creates a grammatically correct noun phrase.

× If you don't know this machine, it will be difficult to use the machine so you needed to read it.

✓ If you don't know this machine, it will be difficult to use, so you need to read the instructions.

Tense and pronoun problems: 'needed' is past tense but present advice needs 'need'. Avoid repeating 'the machine' by using 'use' alone or 'use it'. Replace 'read it' with 'read the instructions' for clarity.

× But if you use a machine that.

✓ But if you use a familiar machine, you may not need to read the instructions.

Fragment: 'But if you use a machine that.' is incomplete. Complete the conditional with a clear clause; choose 'familiar machine' to match intended meaning and provide contrasting result.