Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答案内容明确但有冗余与语法小错误。建议：1) 开头先用一句主题句直接回答（如：My favourite machine at home is the refrigerator.）；2) 使用一到两句具体原因，不要重复相同意思；3) 注意时态与冠词（a cute cleaner → a vacuum cleaner；hot days → hot weather）；4) 合理使用连接词（because, so）使表达更连贯。

例: My favourite machine at home is the refrigerator. It keeps our food and desserts fresh, especially during hot weather, because it slows down bacterial growth. For example, leftovers can stay safe for several days when refrigerated.

提案: 回答包含观点但句子结构混乱与词汇错误。建议：1) 分两部分回答两种机器的作用（use topic sentence）；2) 用连接词分开两种机器的作用（For clothes..., As for cleaning...）；3) 修正词汇错误（a cute cleaner → a vacuum cleaner）并加入具体例子或量化说明。

例: Yes, I think both are important. For example, a washing machine saves hours of hand-washing when there are many family members, and a vacuum cleaner helps me clean a large house quickly, cutting cleaning time from hours to about 30 minutes.

提案: 回答观点明确但表达略显冗长与时态不一致。建议：1) 先给一个简短明确的主题句（Yes, I usually do.）；2) 用一两句说明原因与例子；3) 注意时态与人称一致（I called → I call / I have called； they'll → they usually）。

例: Yes, I usually read the instructions because they explain the correct settings and safety information. If I still have questions, I contact the company and they sometimes show me how to use the machine via a video call.

提案: 回答自相矛盾且表达不清。建议：1) 明确立场（Yes/No）并给出理由；2) 若认为重要，可承认说明阅读说明书有助于安全和长期维护；3) 修正不准确短语（assistant person → customer service; on the vehicle → over the phone / via video call）；4) 控制在最多五句并使用连接词。

例: I believe it is important to at least skim the instructions because they contain safety tips and maintenance advice. However, if something is unclear, I contact the company's customer service and they guide me step by step, often over a video call.

× If I don't put my food or desserts in the refrigerator, it will go stale after a few hours in hot days, especially in summer.

✓ If I don't put my food or desserts in the refrigerator, they will go stale after a few hours on hot days, especially in summer.

错误类型：单复数问题。原句中主语是“my food or desserts”，后文用了单数代词“it”，与复数或不确定数的先行词不一致。应使用复数代词“they”。另外，介词短语应为“on hot days”表示“在炎热的日子里”。建议：用与先行词数一致的代词，并使用正确的介词。

× Yes, washing machines are important because there are many people in my family and washing clothes by hand would take hours of a cute cleaner is also useful since my house is quite big so it saves time and effort when cleaning.

✓ Yes, washing machines are important because there are many people in my family and washing clothes by hand would take hours. A cute cleaner is also useful since my house is quite big, so it saves time and effort when cleaning.

错误类型：句子结构错误。原句缺少连接或标点，导致两个句子被错误地连在一起，读者难以理解。需要用句号或连词分开独立分句，并在适当位置添加逗号以改善可读性。建议：将长句拆分为更短的句子，或使用合适的连接词并加标点。

× A cute cleaner is also useful since my house is quite big so it saves time and effort when cleaning.

✓ A vacuum cleaner is also useful since my house is quite big, so it saves time and effort when cleaning.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用不当。原句使用“cute cleaner”（可爱的清洁工/清洁器）不符合语境，面向家用机器应为“vacuum cleaner”（吸尘器）或“cleaning device”。建议：根据语境使用准确的名词或形容词。

× Yes, it's the only way to know how to use the machine and sometimes I don't understand what the instruction says.

✓ Yes, it's the only way to know how to use the machine, and sometimes I don't understand what the instructions say.

错误类型：现在时问题/单复数一致。原句中“the instruction says”中的“instruction”应为复数“instructions”更常见且与谓语“say”应对应复数形式“say”。建议：使用常见搭配“instructions”并保持主谓一致。

× I called the company that I bought the machine from, they'll teach me how to use it through video calls.

✓ I called the company that I bought the machine from; they'll teach me how to use it through video calls.

错误类型：代词/标点使用不当。原句为两个并列分句，应使用分号或连词连接，不能用逗号拼接独立分句（逗号拼接句）。建议：使用分号或句号，或在逗号后加连词。

× I think this might not be very important to read the instructions because even if I read it, I don't understand it if it's unclear.

✓ I think it might not be very important to read the instructions because even if I read them, I don't understand them if they're unclear.

错误类型：代词使用不当。原句中“read it”与“instructions”（复数）不一致，应改为“read them”；同样“it”指代“instructions”也应为“they/them”，并将“it's unclear”改为“they're unclear”。建议：注意代词与先行词的数一致。

× So most of the times I just call the assistant person in the company I bought the machine from. He'll walk me through the steps on the vehicle.

✓ So most of the time I just call the assistant at the company I bought the machine from. He'll walk me through the steps over the phone/video call.

错误类型：代词及短语使用不当。原句“most of the times”应为“most of the time”；“assistant person”冗余，改为“assistant”；“on the vehicle”用词不当，语境应为“over the phone”或“via video call”。建议：使用固定搭配“most of the time”，简化短语并用合适的介词短语表达“通过电话/视频”。