Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and 'um' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas clearly, and avoid redundancy such as 'make my mind more sharper' (use 'sharper' alone).

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorizing things because I often play games that help sharpen my mind. For example, I can easily remember people's faces, names, numbers, and important dates.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to show cause and effect. Also, avoid filler words and try to be more concise while providing specific feelings or consequences.

例: Yes, I once forgot my best friend's birthday, so I felt very bad and she was upset because we are very close. Therefore, I apologized and promised her that I would not make the same mistake again.

提案: Try to complete your sentences fully and avoid trailing off. Use linking words such as 'also' or 'in addition' to connect ideas. Be more specific about your tasks and avoid filler words to improve clarity.

例: On a daily basis, I need to remember to take care of my health by eating healthy food and going for a walk. In addition, I have to remember important tasks related to my work and studies, such as attending meetings and completing assignments.

提案: Avoid incomplete sentences and filler words. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' to organize your answer. Be specific about how you use apps and alarms to remember important things.

例: I remember important things by using apps on my phone. For example, I make lists in the notes app for groceries, and I also set alarms to remind me of important tasks.

× I uh, play uh, games which help me to make my mind more sharper and I always, uh, remember the people, faces, names and numbers and dates.

✓ I uh, play uh, games which help me to make my mind sharper and I always, uh, remember the people, faces, names, numbers, and dates.

The phrase 'more sharper' is incorrect because 'sharper' is already a comparative adjective. Using 'more' with a comparative adjective is redundant. The correct form is simply 'sharper'. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' in a list for clarity.

× even she's also upset with me because we are very close friends.

✓ even she is also upset with me because we are very close friends.

The contraction 'she's' can mean 'she is' or 'she has', but in this context, the full form 'she is' is clearer and more appropriate. Also, 'even she is also upset' is redundant; 'even she is upset' or 'she is also upset' would be better, but to keep the original meaning, 'she is also upset' is used.

× But after that I uh, apologized and promised to her that next time I will not make any kind of mistake.

✓ But after that I uh, apologized and promised her that next time I will not make any kind of mistake.

The verb 'promise' is followed directly by the object (person) without the preposition 'to'. Therefore, 'promised to her' is incorrect; it should be 'promised her'.

× On my daily basis, I just need to remember about my health, like I have to eat healthy food and go for a walk.

✓ On a daily basis, I just need to remember my health, like I have to eat healthy food and go for a walk.

The phrase 'on my daily basis' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'on a daily basis'. Also, 'remember about' is incorrect; the verb 'remember' does not require the preposition 'about' when followed by a direct object.

× And apart from this, I also have to remember my uh, tasks about my work and studies like meetings and.

✓ And apart from this, I also have to remember my uh, tasks related to my work and studies, like meetings.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'and'. Also, 'tasks about my work and studies' is awkward; 'tasks related to my work and studies' is clearer. The sentence is corrected to be complete and grammatically correct.

× I remember, uh, important things with the help of my apps, like I make a list on notes where I can remember that what I have to, uh, need for my groceries and so on.

✓ I remember, uh, important things with the help of my apps, like I make a list in notes where I can remember what I need for my groceries and so on.

The phrase 'make a list on notes' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' when referring to an app or document. Also, 'remember that what I have to, uh, need' is redundant and awkward; 'remember what I need' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× And I also set alarms which remind me to.

✓ And I also set alarms which remind me to do things.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'to'. Adding 'do things' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.