Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Also, structure your answer clearly by stating your ability first, then explaining how you manage your memory issues with specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I'm not very good at memorising things because I have a poor memory. However, I manage this by writing down important details on paper, which helps me remember them more easily.

提案: Avoid repeating words and filler sounds. Make your answer more coherent by using linking words like 'so' or 'therefore'. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain your method with specific details.

例: Yes, I often forget important things, so I write notes to help me remember them. This method has been very useful, and I always try to stay organized.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and filler words. Organize your answer by listing the things you need to remember clearly and use linking words to connect your ideas. Be specific and concise.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember the times I take my medication, when I have breakfast, and the times I visit my mother and return home. I always keep track of my daily schedule carefully.

提案: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Use present tense consistently and avoid confusing phrases. Explain your method clearly with linking words to show cause and effect.

例: I remember important things by writing them down in my notes. This helps me review them easily and manage my time effectively, which makes me more organized.

× No, I'm good at reading things. Umm, I have uh, such bad memory.

✓ No, I'm good at reading things. Umm, I have such a bad memory.

The phrase 'such bad memory' is missing the article 'a' before 'bad memory'. In English, singular countable nouns like 'memory' require an article. Adding 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Uh, I can deal with it by writing, uh, any details on a paper, uh, to, to easily remember this, uh, and I can handle.

✓ I can deal with it by writing any details on a paper to easily remember them, and I can handle it.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The phrase 'to, to easily remember this' is awkward and 'and I can handle' is incomplete. The correction restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I usually forget the important things, so I can deal with this by writing important notes, uh, to make me easy, uh, to remember this umm.

✓ Yes, I usually forget important things, so I deal with this by writing important notes to make it easier for me to remember them.

The phrase 'to make me easy to remember this' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'to make it easier for me to remember them'. Also, 'can deal' is changed to 'deal' to match habitual action in present tense.

× I need to remember my drug times, drugs times and my breakfast time, uh, the time of uh, of going to my mother and return back to my flat.

✓ I need to remember my drug times, drug times, and my breakfast time, the time of going to my mother's and returning back to my flat.

The phrase 'drugs times' is incorrect; 'drug times' is the correct plural form. Also, 'going to my mother' should be 'going to my mother's' to indicate place (her home). 'Return back' is redundant; 'returning back' is corrected to 'returning'.

× I always need to remember the time of everything I have done in my day.

✓ I always need to remember the time of everything I do in my day.

The phrase 'the time of everything I have done' is past perfect, but the context suggests habitual action, so present simple 'I do' is more appropriate.

× I remembered I remember important things by putting them on my notes so I can easily read them and remember the time of everything I want to release.

✓ I remember important things by putting them in my notes so I can easily read them and remember the time of everything I want to record.

The phrase 'I remembered I remember' is inconsistent; 'I remember' fits better. Also, 'putting them on my notes' should be 'putting them in my notes'. The word 'release' is likely a misuse; 'record' fits the context better.

× To realize it make it makes me very professional in my times.

✓ Realizing this makes me very organized with my time.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'To realize it make it makes me very professional in my times' is awkward. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects grammar.