Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit contradictory and lengthy. Try to give a clear and concise response with a topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Yes, I am generally good at memorising things because I can recall important details from my past. However, sometimes I forget things depending on my mood or situation, which affects my memory.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid repeating 'exam' multiple times.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things several times. For example, once I missed a crucial school exam because I forgot the date, so I had to retake it the following week.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and could be more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, use simpler words like 'write' instead of 'journalise'.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember my routine, which can be challenging because I have many tasks. Therefore, I write in my diary and make a study schedule to stay organized.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using clearer sentence structure and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Because I sometimes have trouble remembering, I write important tasks in my diary and make lists. This helps me stay focused and complete my work efficiently.

× sometimes I remember everything, every detail thing that has happened in my life or in my past.

✓ sometimes I remember everything, every detailed thing that has happened in my life or in my past.

The phrase 'every detail thing' is incorrect because 'detail' should be an adjective describing 'thing'. The correct adjective form is 'detailed'. So, 'every detailed thing' is the proper phrase.

× Once I had my very important exam on my school and I forgot that I had my exam.

✓ Once I had my very important exam at my school and I forgot that I had my exam.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'school'. The correct preposition is 'at' when referring to events happening at a place like school.

× Once I had my very important exam on my school and I forgot that I had my exam.

✓ Once I had a very important exam at my school and I forgot that I had my exam.

The phrase 'my very important exam' is acceptable but 'a very important exam' is more natural unless the exam is uniquely identified. Using 'a' is better here to indicate one of possibly many exams.

× The most important thing that I have to remember in my daily life is my daily routine, which is impossible for me to remember it because there are a lot of things that I do in my daily life.

✓ The most important thing that I have to remember in my daily life is my daily routine, which is impossible for me to remember because there are a lot of things that I do in my daily life.

The phrase 'impossible for me to remember it' is incorrect because the pronoun 'it' is redundant after 'impossible to remember'. Removing 'it' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× But the main thing that I have to remember is to journalise my day in a diary and to make a schedule for my study and all.

✓ But the main thing that I have to remember is to journalise my day in a diary and to make a schedule for my studies and all.

The word 'study' should be plural 'studies' when referring to the general activity of studying or multiple subjects.

× I usually try to write in the diary and make a list the thing that I have to do and the thing that is very important for me to do.

✓ I usually try to write in the diary and make a list of the things that I have to do and the things that are very important for me to do.

The phrase 'make a list the thing' is incorrect. It should be 'make a list of the things' because 'list' requires 'of' and the plural 'things' is needed to refer to multiple items.