Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors which affect naturalness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: I'm not very good at memorising things. For instance, recently my mother told me she wouldn't be coming home, so I needed to prepare dinner myself, but I forgot until it was late. This shows that I often struggle to remember important information.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more complete sentences and linking words to make it coherent. Also, try to provide more specific details to enrich your response.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, my mother told me she wouldn't be coming home, so I needed to prepare meals myself, but I forgot and ended up starving. Therefore, I find it helpful to write things down to remember them better.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, use linking words, and provide specific examples to make your answer more effective and natural.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember important deadlines, such as when to finish team assignments, and the times I have to attend classes. These are essential to manage my schedule effectively.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use linking words and more precise vocabulary to improve coherence and naturalness.

例: I find that writing things down is the best way to remember important tasks. For example, making a to-do list helps me track my progress and manage my time efficiently.

× To be honest, I'm not talent at memory things and better like to forget things frequently.

✓ To be honest, I'm not talented at remembering things and I tend to forget things frequently.

The adjective 'talent' is incorrect here; the correct form is 'talented'. Also, 'memory things' is incorrect; the verb 'remembering' should be used. The phrase 'better like to forget' is awkward and incorrect; 'I tend to forget' is a better expression.

× For example, last time my mom told me she will she would not go back.

✓ For example, last time my mom told me she would not go back.

The sentence contains redundant modal verbs 'will' and 'would' together, which is incorrect. Only 'would' is appropriate here to indicate reported speech in the past.

× Went back home.

✓ She went back home.

The sentence lacks a subject, making it incomplete. Adding 'She' completes the sentence and clarifies who performed the action.

× I need to prepare the dinner for myself but forget it.

✓ I needed to prepare dinner for myself but forgot it.

The sentence mixes present tense 'need' with past context. Both verbs should be in past tense to maintain consistency.

× So I just started.

✓ So I just started cooking.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding the object 'cooking' clarifies what was started.

× No time.

✓ I had no time.

The phrase 'No time.' is a fragment and lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'I had' completes the sentence.

× My mom told me she wouldn't be coming home so I needed to prepare meals for myself, but I just forgot it so I was starving at that time.

✓ My mom told me she wouldn't be coming home, so I needed to prepare meals for myself, but I just forgot, so I was starving at that time.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs commas for clarity. Also, 'forgot it' is better as 'forgot' since 'it' is unnecessary.

× Actually there are few things I need to remember like when I need to finish my team assignments and what time I will go to class like this, but other things I think it's not.

✓ Actually, there are a few things I need to remember, like when I need to finish my team assignments and what time I will go to class, but other things I think I don't need to remember.

The phrase 'there are few things' should be 'there are a few things' to indicate some things. The ending 'but other things I think it's not' is unclear and ungrammatical; it is corrected to 'but other things I think I don't need to remember' for clarity.

× Uh, I think writing down is the best way for me to memorize things.

✓ Uh, I think writing things down is the best way for me to memorize them.

The phrase 'writing down' is incomplete; it should specify what is being written down. Also, 'memorize things' is better replaced with 'memorize them' to avoid repetition.

× You know, make Making A to do list is an efficient way to complete tasks because you could see the progress you have done so that you could to manage your time.

✓ You know, making a to-do list is an efficient way to complete tasks because you can see the progress you have made, so you can manage your time.

The phrase 'make Making A to do list' is incorrect; it should be 'making a to-do list'. 'Could see' and 'could to manage' are incorrect modal verb usages; 'can see' and 'can manage' are appropriate here. 'Progress you have done' should be 'progress you have made'.