Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复和口头语，如“uh”，并且句子结构应更清晰。可以直接表达观点，然后用具体例子支持，避免冗长。

例: I'm not very good at memorizing things, so I use apps on my phone to record important information. This way, I can review it anytime and avoid forgetting.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复表达，应简洁明了地回答问题，并用连贯的句子表达。避免口头语和重复。

例: No, I haven't forgotten anything important because I always write down important things on my phone or laptop to avoid forgetting.

提案: 回答时应减少口头语，句子结构应更流畅。可以使用连接词使表达更连贯，并具体说明记忆内容。

例: I need to remember many things daily, such as my shopping list and tasks for the day. Therefore, I usually make a list to ensure I don't forget anything.

提案: 回答中有较多口头语和重复，应简洁表达并使用连接词使句子更连贯。具体说明使用的工具和方法会更好。

例: I usually remember important things by writing them down in apps on my phone. This helps me keep everything organized and prevents me from missing anything.

× I use my apps, uh, on the phones to keep recording the important things one by 1:00 so that I can review them later or check them anytime if I want.

✓ I use my apps, uh, on the phone to keep recording the important things one by 1:00 so that I can review them later or check them anytime if I want.

“phones”应为单数形式“phone”，因为这里指的是使用手机这个设备，而不是多部手机。

× Actually, no, I haven't because I just note down every important things in my phones or on my laptop just in case to, uh, for just in case to forget these things.

✓ Actually, no, I haven't because I just note down every important thing in my phone or on my laptop just in case I forget these things.

“every”后面应接单数名词，故“important things”应改为“important thing”。“phones”应为单数“phone”，指代手机设备。

× Actually, no, I haven't because I just note down every important things in my phones or on my laptop just in case to, uh, for just in case to forget these things.

✓ Actually, no, I haven't because I just note down every important thing in my phone or on my laptop just in case I forget these things.

“just in case to, uh, for just in case to forget these things”结构不正确，应简化为“just in case I forget these things”，使句子通顺且符合英语习惯。

× So no, I don't have this kind of experience, but my friend had.

✓ So no, I don't have this kind of experience, but my friend has.

此处谈论的是现在的情况，应该用现在时“has”而非过去时“had”。

× Well, I have to remember a lot of things such as shopping list or my uh, task I need to do on that day.

✓ Well, I have to remember a lot of things such as shopping lists or my uh, tasks I need to do on that day.

“shopping list”和“task”应使用复数形式“shopping lists”和“tasks”，因为前面提到的是“a lot of things”，表示多个事项。

× So I usually list all the tasks I have to do on one day in order to uh, in order not to miss them.

✓ So I usually list all the tasks I have to do in one day in order to, uh, in order not to miss them.

“on one day”应改为“in one day”，表示在一天之内完成任务。

× Usually, uh, in most of the time I write down or keep record, keeping record in the app in order.

✓ Usually, uh, most of the time I write down or keep records, keeping records in the app in order.

“keep record”应为“keep records”，且“keeping record”应为“keeping records”，名词复数形式更符合语境。

× Usually, uh, in most of the time I write down or keep record, keeping record in the app in order.

✓ Usually, uh, most of the time I write down or keep records in the app in order.

句子结构混乱，重复表达“keep record, keeping record”，应简化为“write down or keep records in the app in order”，使句子更通顺。