Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“not glad to remember things”应改为“不擅长记忆东西”。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并避免重复和冗余。

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. When I learn English, I spend a lot of time memorising vocabulary and grammar rules. However, I find it easier to remember funny stories and interesting information.

提案: 回答内容不够清晰，语法错误较多，如“the important things is”应为“important things are”，且表达不连贯。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并用连词连接句子。

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, I sometimes forget happy memories from important festivals. To avoid this, I write them down in my diary and read them again later.

提案: 回答中有多处语法和词汇错误，如“make a new friends”应为“making new friends”，“funny drugs”表达不当。建议使用准确的词汇和正确的语法结构。

例: In my daily life, I need to remember many things, such as making new friends, important events, achievements, and special moments. These are all very important to me.

提案: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误严重，且有过多的语气词“uh”。建议简洁明了地表达观点，使用正确的语法和连词。

例: As a university student, I remember important things in many ways. For example, I take photos or videos, write in my diary, and talk about these things with others.

× No, I am not glad to remember things.

✓ No, I am not good at remembering things.

这里“glad”用法不当，应该用形容词“good”来表达擅长某事，同时动词“remember”应使用动名词形式“remembering”。

× I often spend a lot of time to remember vocabulary and the grammar rules.

✓ I often spend a lot of time remembering vocabulary and grammar rules.

动词“spend”后应接动名词形式，不能用不定式“to remember”。

× I think I found the easiest findings.

✓ I think I found the easiest way.

“findings”意为“发现的结果”，此处应使用“way”表示“方法”，更符合语境。

× I have found I am easier to remember funny stories and interest informations.

✓ I have found it easier to remember funny stories and interesting information.

“easier”前应加形式宾语“it”；“interest”应为形容词“interesting”；“informations”不可数名词应用单数“information”。

× the happy memory of some important festivals during my life.

✓ the happy memories of some important festivals during my life.

“memory”应使用复数形式“memories”，表示多次记忆。

× So I will write down then in my daily diary.

✓ So I will write them down in my daily diary.

“then”是副词，表示“然后”，此处应使用宾格代词“them”指代前文内容。

× While I was thinking about it, I will read again.

✓ When I think about it, I will read it again.

时态不一致，前半句应使用一般现在时“think”；“read”后应加宾语“it”。

× I think there are a lot of things need us to remember in my daily life such as make a new friends, some funny drugs or we got a achievement, win something or do something special.

✓ I think there are a lot of things we need to remember in my daily life such as making new friends, some funny jokes, achievements, winning something or doing something special.

“make a new friends”应改为动名词短语“making new friends”，且“friends”复数；“drugs”用词不当，应为“jokes”；“a achievement”冠词错误，应为“an achievement”；句子结构需调整使表达更自然。

× They all very important for us during our life.

✓ They are all very important for us during our lives.

缺少系动词“are”；“life”应使用复数“lives”，表示每个人的生活。

× As a university student, I think, uh, remember importance is can have a lot of shape.

✓ As a university student, I think remembering important things can take many forms.

“remember importance”表达不当，应改为“remembering important things”；“is can have”语法错误，应改为“can take”；“a lot of shape”表达不自然，应为“many forms”。

× for example, take some photos or videos and the writing diary, or we can, uh, talking about the things.

✓ For example, take some photos or videos, write a diary, or we can talk about things.

“the writing diary”应改为动词短语“write a diary”；“talking”应改为动词原形“talk”；去掉多余的冠词“the”使表达更自然。