Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific details. Also, avoid spelling mistakes like 'lift' instead of 'list' and 'too' instead of 'to'.

例: I am quite good at memorising short content because it is easier to remember. However, if the list is long, I usually rely on tools like my mobile phone to help me remember important information.

提案: Improve your answer by correcting grammar and pronunciation errors, and by structuring your response clearly. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to connect ideas logically. Also, be specific about what the 'Admiral card' is, or use a more common term if possible. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

例: Yes, I once forgot my student ID card at home when I went to college for an exam. Because of this, I had to wait for a new card to be issued, which delayed me and made me late for the exam.

提案: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' appropriately. Be specific about what you forget and how your phone helps you. Avoid repetition such as 'I I'.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember meetings and important dates. Because I multitask a lot, I often forget these things. So, I rely on my mobile phone's calendar and reminders to help me stay organised and never miss important appointments.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve grammar for clarity. Use linking phrases like 'as I mentioned earlier' correctly. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific details. For example, explain how you use your phone's calendar and reminders effectively.

例: As I mentioned earlier, I use my phone to remember important things. Specifically, I mark important dates on the calendar app and set reminders to ensure I don't forget them.

× To be honest it depends if the content is short so I can remember it clearly, but if the lift is so long so I required some equipment like mobile phones too remember the things.

✓ To be honest, it depends. If the content is short, I can remember it clearly, but if the list is long, I require some equipment like mobile phones to remember things.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'so' twice and has a conjunction error. Also, 'lift' should be 'list' and 'too' should be 'to'. Breaking the sentence into two and correcting conjunctions improves clarity and grammar.

× Of course, I vividly remember last month I went to the college to give a exam, but I forgetted the Admiral card in my home.

✓ Of course, I vividly remember last month I went to college to give an exam, but I forgot the Adhaar card at my home.

The verb 'forgetted' is incorrect; the past tense of 'forget' is 'forgot'. Also, 'a exam' should be 'an exam' and 'Admiral card' is likely 'Adhaar card'. 'At my home' is more appropriate than 'in my home' in this context.

× Because of this, I suffer a lot, and a new Admiral card takes some time to print, and I got late during my exam.

✓ Because of this, I suffered a lot, and a new Adhaar card takes some time to print, so I was late for my exam.

The verb tense should be past ('suffered') to match the past event. 'Got late during my exam' is incorrect; 'was late for my exam' is the correct expression. Also, 'Admiral card' corrected to 'Adhaar card'.

× Honestly, in my daily life I need mobile phone because I'm multitasking, I easily forget meetings, important days and many more.

✓ Honestly, in my daily life I need a mobile phone because I'm multitasking; I easily forget meetings, important days, and many more things.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'mobile phone'. Also, adding 'things' after 'many more' clarifies the meaning. A semicolon improves sentence structure.

× So I basically rely on my mobile phone which help me to remember these dates and I I never missed the important appointment.

✓ So I basically rely on my mobile phone which helps me to remember these dates, and I have never missed an important appointment.

The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'mobile phone'. 'I I' is a typo and corrected to 'I have'. 'The important appointment' changed to 'an important appointment' for general reference.

× As I earlier earlier mentioned, I used my phone for remember important things as well as I.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I use my phone to remember important things as well.

The phrase 'earlier earlier' is repeated and corrected to 'earlier'. 'Used' changed to 'use' to match present tense context. 'For remember' should be 'to remember'. The phrase 'as well as I' is incomplete and removed.

× I use the calendar for important days by marking the important days.

✓ I use the calendar to mark important days.

The phrase 'for important days by marking the important days' is redundant and awkward. Using 'to mark important days' is concise and grammatically correct.