Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but has grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to avoid repeating words and use correct verb forms. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'I I am good at memorizing like lyrics of a song or a story of a book', say 'I am good at memorizing things like song lyrics or stories from books.'

例: I am quite good at memorising certain types of information, such as song lyrics and stories from books. However, I find it difficult to remember phone numbers because they lack meaningful context.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to form complete sentences and provide specific examples. Use linking words to explain the situation logically. For example, say 'Yes, I have forgotten important documents before, especially when I had an important meeting. Sometimes I also forget to bring the appropriate outfit for such occasions.'

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, once I forgot to bring essential documents to an important meeting, which caused some problems. Also, sometimes I forget to wear the proper outfit for formal events.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer sentence structures. Use linking words to organize your ideas. For example, say 'In my daily life, I need to remember my work schedule, meetings, and client details. Among these, planning my work routine is the most important.'

例: In my daily life, I need to remember my work schedule, upcoming meetings, and details about my clients. Among these, planning my work routine carefully is very important to stay organized.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but has some grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Use plural forms correctly and complete your thoughts. For example, say 'I try to remember important things by making plans and noting them down in my diary or mobile phone. This helps me stay organized and not forget important tasks.'

例: I remember important things by making plans and writing notes either in my diary or on my mobile phone. This method helps me stay organized and ensures I don't forget important tasks.

× Well, it depends on information.

✓ Well, it depends on the information.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'information'. In English, 'information' is an uncountable noun and usually requires 'the' when referring to specific information. Adding 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× In some cases I I am good at memorizing like lyrics of a song or a story of a book.

✓ In some cases, I am good at memorizing things like the lyrics of a song or the story of a book.

The sentence has a repeated word 'I I' which is a typographical error. Also, 'memorizing like lyrics' is incomplete; it should be 'memorizing things like the lyrics'. Additionally, 'lyrics' and 'story' need the definite article 'the' because they refer to specific items. Adding commas improves clarity.

× However, I am suffering to remember phone number.

✓ However, I have difficulty remembering phone numbers.

The phrase 'I am suffering to remember' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'I have difficulty remembering'. Also, 'phone number' should be plural 'phone numbers' to generalize. Using the gerund 'remembering' after 'difficulty' is grammatically correct.

× Yes, I often forget important things such as important documents that should be.

✓ Yes, I often forget important things such as important documents that I should bring.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'should be' which is incomplete. It needs an object or verb to complete the meaning. Adding 'I should bring' clarifies the intended meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× We are with me in a important meeting and sometimes I forget to require important outfit which is.

✓ I am with them in an important meeting, and sometimes I forget to bring the important outfit required.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'We are with me' is incorrect; it should be 'I am with them'. 'a important' should be 'an important' because 'important' starts with a vowel sound. 'Forget to require important outfit which is' is incomplete and unclear; changing it to 'forget to bring the important outfit required' makes it meaningful and grammatically correct.

× Well, in my daily life I need to remember the work schedule and the meeting will be held in my work and sometimes the detail of my clients and so on.

✓ Well, in my daily life, I need to remember the work schedule, the meetings held at my workplace, and sometimes the details of my clients, and so on.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'The meeting will be held in my work' is better expressed as 'the meetings held at my workplace'. 'Detail' should be plural 'details' when referring to multiple items. Adding commas improves readability.

× But among them it's very important to planning my work routine.

✓ But among them, it's very important to plan my work routine.

The phrase 'to planning' is incorrect; after 'to' (a preposition), the base form of the verb 'plan' should be used, not the gerund 'planning'. This corrects the infinitive form needed here.

× Well, now I try to remember things by making plan and sometimes I like to note down either in my diary or in my mobile phone.

✓ Well, now I try to remember things by making plans, and sometimes I like to note them down either in my diary or on my mobile phone.

'Making plan' should be plural 'making plans' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'note down either in my diary or in my mobile phone' is awkward; 'note them down' clarifies the object, and 'on my mobile phone' is the correct preposition for devices.

× It helps me a lot. It make me organized and.

✓ It helps me a lot. It makes me organized and more efficient.

'It make me' is incorrect; the third person singular form 'makes' should be used. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' Adding 'more efficient' completes the thought and improves clarity.