Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and has some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences shorter and clearer. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'I'm not good at memorising things, so I write important tasks in my diary and use my phone's notepad to remember them.'

例: I'm not very good at memorising things, so I write important tasks in my diary. Also, I use the notepad app on my phone, which helps me remember what I need to do.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has some awkward phrasing and filler words like 'uh'. Try to avoid fillers and use clearer sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain reasons. For example, 'I haven't forgotten anything important because I use reminder apps on my phone that notify me.'

例: I haven't forgotten anything important because I use reminder apps on my phone. They notify me about tasks, so I can complete everything on time.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas better and use linking words like 'also' and 'therefore'. For example, 'I use my mobile phone and diary to remember tasks. Also, my parents remind me sometimes, so I complete my tasks on time.'

例: I use my mobile phone and diary to remember important things. Also, my parents remind me sometimes, so I always finish my tasks on time.

提案: Your answer repeats words and has some grammar issues. Try to avoid repetition and make sentences clearer. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' to give details. For example, 'I remember important things by using my mobile phone. For example, I write reminders in an app that notifies me.'

例: I remember important things by using my mobile phone. For example, I write reminders in an app that sends me notifications, so I don't forget.

× I'm not good at memorising something like whenever I have any important task

✓ I'm not good at memorising things; whenever I have any important task

The word 'something' is incorrect here because it refers to an unspecified singular item, but the context requires a plural or uncountable noun. 'Things' is more appropriate to indicate multiple items to memorise.

× I try to write down on my diary

✓ I try to write down in my diary

The correct preposition with 'write down' and 'diary' is 'in' because you write inside the diary, not on it.

× which helped me to remember this important task as well as I try to follow my notepad on mobile phone which also allow me to do do for important task

✓ which helps me to remember this important task, and I also try to follow my notepad on my mobile phone which also allows me to do important tasks

The pronouns and verb forms are inconsistent. 'Helped' should be 'helps' to match present tense. 'Allow' should be 'allows' to agree with singular subject 'notepad'. Also, 'do do' is a repetition error and 'important task' should be plural 'important tasks' for general meaning.

× By using mobile phone, I didn't forget anything like whenever I put down any kind of task reminder apps which alarm me or which notification me to remember this important work

✓ By using my mobile phone, I haven't forgotten anything because whenever I put down any kind of task in reminder apps, they alarm me or notify me to remember this important work

The past tense 'didn't forget' is less appropriate here; present perfect 'haven't forgotten' fits better for ongoing relevance. Also, 'which alarm me or which notification me' is incorrect; it should be 'they alarm me or notify me' to match plural subject and correct verb usage.

× I usually follow some of things which really help me to remember something such as my mobile phone as well diary

✓ I usually use some things which really help me to remember, such as my mobile phone as well as my diary

The phrase 'follow some of things' is incorrect; 'use some things' is better. Also, 'as well diary' should be 'as well as my diary' to correctly connect the items.

× Sometimes I inform my parents they are also Remember Me, remind me to for my important task

✓ Sometimes I inform my parents; they also remember me and remind me about my important tasks

The phrase 'they are also Remember Me' is incorrect; it should be 'they also remember me'. Also, 'remind me to for my important task' is incorrect; it should be 'remind me about my important tasks'.

× I always complete my task on the time

✓ I always complete my tasks on time

The phrase 'on the time' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'on time' without 'the'. Also, 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match general meaning.

× I'm already mentioned there are number of way I can remember important things

✓ I have already mentioned that there are a number of ways I can remember important things

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'I'm already mentioned' should be 'I have already mentioned'. Also, 'number of way' should be 'a number of ways' for correct article and plural form.

× one of them mobile phone which is really essential role plays in our daily life

✓ one of them is the mobile phone, which really plays an essential role in our daily life

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'one of them'. Also, 'essential role plays' is incorrect; it should be 'plays an essential role'.

× I usually prefer to write down anything on my mobile reminder reminder app which gives me notification and I can easily remind important something

✓ I usually prefer to write down anything in my mobile reminder app which gives me notifications and helps me easily remember important things

The preposition 'on' should be 'in' when referring to writing inside an app. 'Reminder reminder app' is a repetition error. 'Gives me notification' should be plural 'notifications'. 'I can easily remind important something' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me easily remember important things'.