Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达不够清晰，存在语法和用词错误，且内容重复。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并使用正确的语法结构。

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things, especially English vocabulary, because I often practice and review new words regularly.

提案: 回答中有较多的语气词“uh”，影响流畅度。建议减少语气词，使用连贯的句子表达，并提供具体细节支持观点。

例: No, I have never forgotten anything important because I always prepare well in advance, such as studying thoroughly before an important exam.

提案: 回答结构混乱，表达不完整。建议先明确主题句，然后用具体细节支持，避免语法错误和不完整句子。

例: In my daily life, I need to remember my study schedule and part-time job tasks because I am a college student supporting myself financially.

提案: 回答中语气词过多，句子不够连贯。建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，并具体说明准备过程。

例: If I have something important, I prepare in advance by writing notes and practicing multiple times, like when I had a presentation last week.

× I think it's maybe yes.

✓ I think maybe yes.

句中“it's maybe yes”中“it's”是不必要的，正确表达应为“I think maybe yes”，去掉多余的“it's”。

× I have had a remember memories rates about remember the words the the words.

✓ I have had a good memory for remembering words.

原句中“a remember memories rates”结构混乱，单复数和词性使用错误。应使用“a good memory”表示记忆力，且“rates”不合适。

× So I think it's yes, I can remember everything about their details.

✓ So I think yes, I can remember everything about the details.

“their details”中“their”指代不明且不合适，改为“the details”更准确。

× No, until now, I have never forgotten something important.

✓ No, until now, I have never forgotten anything important.

“something important”在否定句中应使用“anything important”。

× When I'm, uh, at, uh, for example, I have to get an important test tomorrow.

✓ For example, when I have an important test tomorrow,

原句结构混乱，应调整为“例如，当我明天有重要考试时，”使句子通顺。

× I prepare, uh, this test, uh, totally, uh, to ensure my, uh, behavior on the test, so I will never forget it.

✓ I prepare for this test thoroughly to ensure my performance, so I will never forget it.

“prepare this test”缺少介词“for”，且“behavior on the test”表达不当，应为“performance”。

× I always depart my daily life 2 points, 1 is work and one is study because I'm still a college college student but I had to do some part time job to ensure my living expenses.

✓ I always divide my daily life into two parts: one is work and the other is study because I'm still a college student but I have to do some part-time jobs to cover my living expenses.

“depart”用错，应为“divide”；“2 points”应为“two parts”；“college college student”重复；“had to”时态不符，应为“have to”；“part time job”应为复数“part-time jobs”。

× So I need to remember what I should work today and what.

✓ So I need to remember what work I should do today and what not.

句子不完整，缺少谓语和宾语，补充完整表达。

× Well, if I have something important to do tomorrow, I'll prepare them before tomorrow.

✓ Well, if I have something important to do tomorrow, I'll prepare for it beforehand.

“prepare them before tomorrow”表达不自然，应为“prepare for it beforehand”。

× For example, last week I had an important presentation of our college.

✓ For example, last week I had an important presentation at our college.

“presentation of our college”表达不准确，应为“presentation at our college”。

× So I had to, uh, prepare them and, uh, and uh, write them and uh, uh, practice them again and again to ensure.

✓ So I had to prepare it, write it, and practice it again and again to ensure success.

“prepare them”指代不明，改为“prepare it”；句尾不完整，补充“to ensure success”。