Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和时态使用不准确，且有些重复。建议使用正确的时态，避免重复，并且使句子更自然流畅。

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, when I was a student, I often forgot my assignments and their deadlines. This was a bad habit that I really needed to change.

提案: 回答中有重复且表达不够连贯，建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并且避免重复表达。

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before, such as assignments and lectures when I was a child. This made me feel very stressed, so I really want to improve this habit.

提案: 回答中表达不够清晰，建议理清句子结构，使用更准确的词汇，并且避免口语化的填充词。

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to take my medicine regularly. If I forget, I add reminders to my phone, which alerts me when it's time. This method is very convenient.

提案: 回答基本清楚，但有语法错误和重复，建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和单复数形式。

例: I use reminders on my phone to keep track of important things. The alarms notify me at the right time, which is very convenient and helps reduce my stress.

× No, I often forget things.

✓ No, I often forgot things.

The question is about past ability, so the verb should be in past tense 'forgot' instead of present tense 'forget'.

× For example, when I was a student, I often forget the assignment, the deadline of assignment.

✓ For example, when I was a student, I often forgot the assignment, the deadline of the assignment.

The sentence refers to past events, so 'forget' should be 'forgot'. Also, 'deadline of assignment' needs the definite article 'the' before 'assignment'.

× So it is really a bad habit, I have to change it.

✓ So it is really a bad habit, and I have to change it.

Two independent clauses joined without a conjunction cause a run-on sentence. Adding 'and' corrects the sentence structure.

× Sure, I forgot the assignment.

✓ Sure, I forgot the assignment.

This sentence is correct in past tense; no correction needed.

× When I was a child, I forgot the lecture, I forgot the assignment.

✓ When I was a child, I forgot the lecture and I forgot the assignment.

Two independent clauses joined by a comma cause a comma splice. Using 'and' corrects the sentence structure.

× So it makes me feel very very stressful.

✓ So it makes me feel very very stressed.

'Stressful' describes something that causes stress; 'stressed' describes a feeling. Here, the student feels stressed, so 'stressed' is correct.

× It is bad and I really want to correct it.

✓ It is bad, and I really want to correct it.

Two independent clauses joined without a comma before 'and' cause a run-on sentence. Adding a comma improves clarity.

× MMM, the things I have to do in the frequency of the medicine I should take usually is this 2 kind of things.

✓ MMM, the things I have to do and the frequency of the medicine I should take are usually these two kinds of things.

The original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect quantifiers. 'Is' should be 'are' to agree with plural subject. 'This 2 kind of things' should be 'these two kinds of things' for correct quantifier and demonstrative pronoun.

× And if I don't remember it, I will put it on my list so that my phone will ring when I have to do it.

✓ If I don't remember it, I put it on my list so that my phone will ring when I have to do it.

The sentence mixes future and present tense inconsistently. Since the habit is general, present tense 'put' fits better than 'will put'. Also, starting with 'And' is informal and unnecessary.

× I have a reminder on my phones so I will put important things in it.

✓ I have a reminder on my phone, so I put important things in it.

'Phones' should be singular 'phone' as usually one phone is used. Also, 'will put' changed to 'put' for habitual action.

× There is in there is an alarm that remind me of the important things, so it is very convenient and makes me feel less stress.

✓ There is an alarm that reminds me of important things, so it is very convenient and makes me feel less stressed.

The phrase 'There is in there is' is redundant and incorrect. 'Remind' should be 'reminds' to agree with singular subject 'alarm'. 'Less stress' should be 'less stressed' to describe feeling.