Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. For example, explain why you think memorizing is hard or easy for you, and avoid repeating similar ideas.

例: I think I have an average memory. Sometimes I forget simple things or words, which makes learning a new language challenging. However, I try to practice regularly to improve my memory.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Provide a direct response with a clear topic sentence and add specific examples or reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, I once missed a meeting because I didn't write it down. Since then, I try to use reminders to avoid forgetting important events.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar mistakes. Provide specific examples and avoid redundancy.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember my schedule and maintain healthy habits, such as drinking enough water and eating on time. Additionally, I have routines like doing homework and household chores.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, organize your ideas logically and correct minor grammar errors.

例: I usually try to remember important things by keeping them in my mind. Sometimes, I tell my family or friends so they can remind me. If something is very important, I write it down in my phone's notes app.

× Most of people who know me say that I have a good memory, but I don't think so.

✓ Most people who know me say that I have a good memory, but I don't think so.

The phrase 'Most of people' is incorrect because 'people' is a plural noun and does not require 'of' after 'most'. The correct form is 'Most people'.

× Even so, even it's can be hard to learn some English, some new language.

✓ Even so, it can be hard to learn some English or a new language.

The phrase 'even it's can be hard' is incorrect. 'It's' is a contraction for 'it is', so 'even it's can be' is grammatically wrong. Also, 'some new language' should be 'a new language' because 'language' is singular and countable. The corrected sentence uses 'it can be hard' and 'a new language'.

× Of course, as many people do it, but I can't even remember the events when I forgot something but.

✓ Of course, as many people do, but I can't even remember the events when I forgot something.

The phrase 'do it' is unnecessary and incorrect here; 'do' refers to forgetting, so 'do' alone suffices. Also, the sentence ends with an unnecessary 'but'. The corrected sentence removes 'it' and the trailing 'but'.

× In my daily life, of course it's necessary for me to remember my daily plans and some healthy habits that I have to do, for example, drinking enough water or eat on time.

✓ In my daily life, of course it's necessary for me to remember my daily plans and some healthy habits that I have to follow, for example, drinking enough water or eating on time.

The phrase 'habits that I have to do' is incorrect; we 'follow' habits, not 'do' them. Also, parallel structure requires 'drinking' and 'eating' both in gerund form. The correction uses 'follow' and changes 'eat' to 'eating' for consistency.

× Also, I have just daily base routines like doing homework or doing chores at home.

✓ Also, I just have daily basic routines like doing homework or doing chores at home.

The phrase 'daily base routines' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'basic'. Also, the word order is improved by placing 'just' before 'have'.

× Usually I just memorize it on my mind or sometimes I can tell it to my friends or close people like family that I have to do.

✓ Usually I just memorize it in my mind or sometimes I can tell it to my friends or close people like family that I have to do.

The phrase 'memorize it on my mind' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in my mind'.

× Then they can remind me if I did it or even it's so important I can write it down to my phone like notes and that's it.

✓ Then they can remind me if I forget, or if it's so important I can write it down on my phone like notes and that's it.

The phrase 'if I did it' is incorrect in this context; 'if I forget' fits better. Also, 'write it down to my phone' should be 'write it down on my phone'. The correction addresses these issues.