Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Use correct tense and avoid redundancy. For example, say "When I was young, I was good at memorizing lectures, but now as an adult, I sometimes forget things."

例: When I was young, I was good at memorizing lectures and other information, but now that I am an adult, I sometimes forget things.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, "Yes, I once forgot important work documents during a training in Manila, which made me feel tense. Fortunately, I found them later at the mall where I left them."

例: Yes, I once forgot important work documents during a training in Manila, which made me feel tense. Fortunately, I found them later at the mall where I left them.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more complete. Avoid incomplete sentences and improve coherence. For example, "I need to remember my daily tasks at work because I deal with sick people, so I must stay focused and not get distracted."

例: I need to remember my daily tasks at work because I deal with sick people, so I must stay focused and not get distracted.

提案: Use more natural expressions and clarify your methods. For example, "I usually use my phone's calendar app or a physical calendar on my desk to keep track of important tasks like meetings and duties, so I don't forget them."

例: I usually use my phone's calendar app or a physical calendar on my desk to keep track of important tasks like meetings and duties, so I don't forget them.

× In terms of that, before when I was young, I am good at memorizing my lectures at school or other things, but now that I turn adults, I don't.

✓ In terms of that, before when I was young, I was good at memorizing my lectures at school or other things, but now that I am an adult, I don't.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'I am good' should be 'I was good' to match the past time frame 'when I was young'. Also, 'now that I turn adults' is incorrect; it should be 'now that I am an adult' to correctly express the present state.

× When I was having a training in Manila, I forget my important things that papers my documents at work.

✓ When I was having training in Manila, I forgot my important papers and documents at work.

'A training' is incorrect because 'training' is an uncountable noun here, so 'a' should be removed. Also, 'forget' should be in past tense 'forgot' to match the past time frame. The phrase 'my important things that papers my documents' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'my important papers and documents'.

× So I go back in the mall where I forget it but luckily it was there.

✓ So I went back to the mall where I forgot it but luckily it was there.

The sentence describes a past event, so verbs should be in past tense: 'go' becomes 'went' and 'forget' becomes 'forgot'. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'to' when referring to going back to a place.

× Well, I need to remember the. My job on what I'm going to do because I'm dealing with sick people, so I need to be focused on that and not thinking other things.

✓ Well, I need to remember my job and what I'm going to do because I'm dealing with sick people, so I need to be focused on that and not think about other things.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'I need to remember the.' is incomplete. It should be combined with the next sentence for clarity. Also, 'not thinking other things' should be 'not think about other things' to use the correct verb form and preposition.

× Actually, I put it in a calendar in my phone or I have a 10 calendar at my table in our house.

✓ Actually, I put it in the calendar on my phone or I have a calendar on my table at our house.

'A 10 calendar' is incorrect; it likely means 'a calendar' or 'a desk calendar'. The number '10' is unnecessary and confusing here. Also, the prepositions 'in' and 'at' are corrected to 'on' for calendar placement.

× So I will not forget the things that I will do within the day.

✓ So I will not forget the things that I will do during the day.

The phrase 'within the day' is awkward; 'during the day' is the correct expression to indicate the time frame.

× So it's recording.

✓ So it's recorded.

The phrase 'it's recording' is incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is that the events are noted or saved, so 'it's recorded' is appropriate.