Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, and avoid vague phrases like 'I thought'. Also, use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, you could say: 'Yes, I am quite good at memorising things, especially when the subject interests me, such as biological science.'

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things, especially when the subject interests me, such as biological science.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is a bit confusing. Try to answer directly and clearly, using linking words to explain your point. Also, avoid filler words like 'umm' and correct your sentence structure. For example: 'I have never forgotten important appointments like tests or doctor visits, but sometimes I forget where I put things.'

例: I have never forgotten important appointments like tests or doctor visits, but sometimes I forget where I put things.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and correct grammar. For example: 'I need to remember my schedule because it varies throughout the week. Depending on the day, I have to attend either on-site or online activities.'

例: I need to remember my schedule because it varies throughout the week. Depending on the day, I have to attend either on-site or online activities.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using linking words and correcting grammar. Avoid filler words like 'umm'. For example: 'I usually make notes on my phone and use a schedule book to record important events. Additionally, I set alarms to remind me when the event is approaching.'

例: I usually make notes on my phone and use a schedule book to record important events. Additionally, I set alarms to remind me when the event is approaching.

× I thought I'm good at memorizing things because based on my interests, I love to learn biological science more than a calculated science.

✓ I think I'm good at memorizing things because, based on my interests, I love to learn biological science more than calculated science.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes past tense 'I thought' with present tense 'I'm good'. Since the statement reflects a current opinion, present tense 'I think' is appropriate. Also, 'a calculated science' should be 'calculated science' without 'a' because 'science' is uncountable here.

× I never forgot something important like an the scheduled times, umm, what? The test time, the appointment of the doctor, et cetera.

✓ I have never forgotten something important like the scheduled times, umm, what? The test time, the doctor's appointment, et cetera.

The present perfect tense 'have never forgotten' is more suitable to express experience up to now. Also, 'an the' is incorrect; it should be just 'the'. 'The appointment of the doctor' is better expressed as 'the doctor's appointment' for natural phrasing.

× But sometime I forgot the pace that I put the things.

✓ But sometimes I forget the place where I put things.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Forgot' is past tense, but the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'forget' is better. 'Pace' is a misspelling of 'place'. 'The things' should be 'things' without 'the' for general reference.

× I need to remember the schedule in my daily life because my schedule is different among the week.

✓ I need to remember the schedule in my daily life because my schedule is different during the week.

'Among the week' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'during the week' to indicate time within the week.

× I have to go to the different places like an on site and online is depend on the day.

✓ I have to go to different places like on-site and online depending on the day.

The phrase 'an on site' is incorrect; 'on-site' is an adjective and should be hyphenated without 'an'. 'Is depend' is incorrect; it should be 'depending' to indicate the action varies by day.

× I'd make a note in my phones and I'd use a schedule book to record it.

✓ I'd make a note on my phone and I'd use a schedule book to record it.

'Phones' is plural but usually one uses a single phone for notes, so 'phone' is correct. Also, the preposition with 'make a note' is 'on' not 'in'.

× And the last thing I make umm alarm to remind me again when the event is coming up.

✓ And lastly, I set an alarm to remind me again when the event is coming up.

'The last thing I make umm alarm' is awkward and incorrect. 'Set an alarm' is the correct phrase. Also, 'And lastly' is a better transition. 'Umm' should be omitted in formal speech.