Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific examples. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, I always remember important dates like exams and appointments. Additionally, I keep track of my daily tasks to stay organized.

提案: Your answer tells a relevant story but has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrasing. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I once forgot my best friend's birthday because I was busy on a college trip. As a result, I felt very embarrassed when I saw her afterwards. This experience taught me to set reminders for important dates.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to give a concise topic sentence and then add specific examples with linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: In daily life, I need to remember my schedule, such as when to start work and when to attend meetings. Moreover, keeping track of appointments helps me stay organized.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use clear sentences with proper grammar and linking words to explain your methods effectively.

例: I usually write notes and set alarm reminders on my phone. This method is very effective, especially for appointments scheduled weeks in advance, as it helps me remember important tasks easily.

× Yes, I do. While I am uh, I remember the dates which are free checks were important place in my life.

✓ Yes, I do. While I am, uh, I remember the dates which are free checks were an important part of my life.

The sentence lacks the article 'an' before 'important place' and 'place' should be 'part' to correctly express the meaning. Also, 'important place' is incorrect in this context; 'important part' is the correct phrase.

× So I I remember those dates and while on our daily life, I just keep eye on what should I have to do and yeah.

✓ So I remember those dates, and in our daily life, I just keep an eye on what I have to do, and yeah.

The sentence has redundancy ('I I'), missing articles ('keep eye' should be 'keep an eye'), and awkward phrasing ('while on our daily life' should be 'in our daily life'). The corrected sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, it was my blunder mistake I can say because it was the birthday of my best friend and I was busy at my college trip and then I forget to wish her and I cannot even forget that how was how I faced her after.

✓ Yes, it was my blunder mistake, I can say, because it was the birthday of my best friend and I was busy on my college trip, and then I forgot to wish her, and I cannot even forget how I faced her afterwards.

The verb 'forget' should be in past tense 'forgot' to match the past context. Also, 'busy at my college trip' should be 'busy on my college trip'. The phrase 'how was how I faced her after' is awkward and corrected to 'how I faced her afterwards' for clarity.

× Well, on our daily life, the things which are related to our daily, daily schedule, so we need to keep them in our mind like at what time we are we need to start working and when to go to the work and all these things I need to remember in my daily life.

✓ Well, in our daily life, the things which are related to our daily schedule, so we need to keep them in our mind, like at what time we need to start working and when to go to work, and all these things I need to remember in my daily life.

The preposition 'on' should be 'in' when referring to 'daily life'. Also, 'go to the work' should be 'go to work' as 'work' here is uncountable and does not need 'the'.

× I keep track the while I make notice and I put alarm reminder on my phone.

✓ I keep track while I make notes and I put an alarm reminder on my phone.

The phrase 'keep track the' is incorrect; it should be 'keep track'. 'Make notice' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make notes'. Also, 'alarm reminder' needs an article 'an' before it.

× So this is a very easy way nowadays to keep things here in mind like the appointment after one or two weeks then the reminder only is best way so I can remember the things while doing this.

✓ So this is a very easy way nowadays to keep things in mind, like appointments after one or two weeks; the reminder is the best way, so I can remember things by doing this.

The sentence is run-on and lacks proper punctuation. 'Here in mind' should be 'in mind'. 'The reminder only is best way' is awkward and corrected to 'the reminder is the best way'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.