Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较自然，但存在冗余与语法细节问题。建议：1) 开头用一句明确的主题句回应问题；2) 控制长度在3–4句内，避免重复（如多次用“remember”与“I can”）；3) 用连词改善流畅性（例如 because / for example / moreover）；4) 调整时态与冠词（例如 “about two years ago” 后不用现在时描述过去经历）。具体练习：用一至两句说明自己记忆好的原因或例子，再补充一两个具体细节并用连词衔接。

例: Yes, I’m good at remembering things. For example, I can still recall the name and exact location of a restaurant I visited two years ago because I paid attention to its distinctive décor and menu. This ability helps me remember past conversations and important places.

提案: 内容真实但表达有些重复且语法不够准确。建议：1) 直接用一句主题句承认曾经忘记重要事情；2) 用连词（because/so）简洁说明原因，避免重复说明“so … so …”；3) 注意时态一致（use past simple for past events）和数字表达（“her 20th birthday”）；4) 加一句结果或补救措施使回答完整。

例: Yes, I once forgot my best friend’s 20th birthday because I was studying intensively for an important exam at the time. As a result, I missed the party, but I immediately apologised and took her out for dinner to make it up.

提案: 回答含糊且结构混乱，有赘述和不完整句子。建议：1) 用一到两句列出最重要的事项（例如 deadlines, birthdays）；2) 每项后用简短理由说明为什么要记住，保持句子完整；3) 避免无意义填充词（umm）和矛盾结尾（“I think I don't have to”不清楚指代）；4) 使用连接词（firstly, also, finally）使条理清晰。

例: I need to remember deadlines for my work and assignments because missing them can cause problems. I also remember important dates like my parents’ and friends’ birthdays so I can celebrate with them.

提案: 方法清晰但语言重复且口语语填较多。建议：1) 用简洁的步骤描述方法，控制在3句内；2) 使用更自然的短语（e.g. make a to-do list, set reminders/alarms, use calendar apps）；3) 避免填充词（uh/um）并用连词连接步骤；4) 可举一例说明该方法如何帮你成功记住某事。

例: I usually make a to-do list and enter important dates into my phone calendar. Then I set alarms a few days earlier as reminders, which helps me prepare in advance and avoid last-minute rushes.

× I can remember the restaurant I've been to about two years ago.

✓ I can remember the restaurant I went to about two years ago.

该句中同时使用了过去时间状语“about two years ago”和现在完成时“I've been to”，英文中通常不在明确的过去时间点（如“two years ago”）与现在完成时一起使用。应使用一般过去时“went”。建议：若句中出现具体过去时间（yesterday, two years ago等），用过去时；若不提具体时间，可用现在完成时。

× I can also remember what I've said a long time ago, while I find many others don't have this ability.

✓ I can also remember what I said a long time ago, while I find many others don't have this ability.

同样问题：句中有过去时间标志“a long time ago”，不应使用现在完成时“I've said”，应使用一般过去时“said”。建议：遇到明确过去时间时用过去时。

× I've forgotten my best friend's 20 year old birthday because I was busy with preparing an important exam that time, so my mind was crowded with all the knowledge that I need in the exam, so I just forgot it at all.

✓ I forgot my best friend's 20th birthday because I was busy preparing for an important exam at that time, so my mind was full of all the knowledge I needed for the exam, and I completely forgot it.

多个问题符合列表中“单复数”“过去时”“介词”“冠词”等，但根据要求只修正列出类型中的问题，这里主要为过去时（5）和介词使用（11）以及冠词（22）。原句中使用了现在完成时“I've forgotten”与具体过去时间应改为一般过去“I forgot”；“busy with preparing”不自然，应为“busy preparing”或“busy with preparation”；“at that time”比“that time”更自然；“the knowledge that I need”应改为过去时“needed”；“forgot it at all”不地道，改为“completely forgot it”。建议：讲述过去具体事件用过去时，搭配固定短语如“busy preparing”或“preparing for an exam”。

× What do you need to remember in your daily life? ... Well, I think I have to remember the deadline of my daily tasks on and it's maybe the top priority.

✓ Well, I think I have to remember the deadlines of my daily tasks, and they're probably the top priority.

原句中的“deadline of my daily tasks on”结构错误且缺少冠词/复数。应使用复数“deadlines”和合适连词“and”，代词与动词一致“they're”。建议：用复数表示多项任务的截止日期，注意主谓一致。

× Besides it, I also need to remember the important days such as the anniversary or my parents, my friends or my lover's birthday. It's also important umm and other things. I think I don't have to.

✓ Besides that, I also need to remember important days such as anniversaries and the birthdays of my parents, my friends, or my partner. Other things are also important, but I don't have to remember everything.

原句存在代词和名词搭配错误（11、12、26、22）。“Besides it”应为“Besides that”；“the anniversary or my parents, my friends or my lover's birthday”结构混乱，应分为“anniversaries and the birthdays of...”；“lover”在正式口语中常用“partner”；最后句“I think I don't have to”不完整，需补全。建议：理清并列关系，使用正确介词结构“the birthdays of ...”。

× Well, firstly I have A to do list, so when I need to remember something important, I'll record it on my To Do List 1st and then I may set a clock, set an alarm to notice me, uh, this thing is uh, approaching, so I have to prepare for it, uh, earlier.

✓ Well, firstly I have a to-do list, so when I need to remember something important, I'll record it on my to-do list first and then I may set a clock or an alarm to notify me that the event is approaching, so I can prepare for it earlier.

问题包括冠词错误（22）和动词搭配（8/11）。“A to do list”应为小写且连字符“a to-do list”；“1st”口语中用“first”；“set an alarm to notice me”错误，应为“set an alarm to notify me”或“remind me”；“this thing is approaching”改为“the event is approaching”更自然；“so I have to prepare for it earlier”时态与情态更合适为“so I can prepare for it earlier”。建议：注意冠词和常用固定搭配“set an alarm to notify/remind someone”。