Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one clear supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid negative or offensive phrasing (e.g., "like a dump") and correct basic grammar ("I have a problem remembering things", "since I was a kid"). Use a varied but appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "poor memory").

例: I’m not very good at memorising things. Since I was a child I’ve tended to forget details of conversations and daily tasks, so I often make lists or set reminders to cope.

提案: Give a clear, chronological account with linking words (first/then/so) and correct verb forms. Be specific about the consequence and what you learned. Keep to 2–3 sentences to be natural and coherent.

例: Yes. Once I missed an important university exam because I misunderstood the start time; I arrived very late and ended up not taking the test, so I learned to double-check schedules and set multiple alarms.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific examples using linking words (for example/for instance). Reduce fillers (uh, umm) and use precise vocabulary (patient names, test procedures, analytical processes).

例: I need to remember many work-related details because I work in a medical laboratory. For example, I must recall patient names, which tests to run, and the correct procedures for processing and analysing samples.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence describing your strategies, then give one or two specific methods and a brief result using linking words (so/as a result). Avoid repetition and contradictory statements; correct grammar and clarity are important.

例: Even though I struggle with memory, I use practical strategies to remember important things. For instance, I set phone alarms and write clear notes, so I rarely miss critical tasks.

× No, unfortunately I have problem in memorizing things.

✓ No, unfortunately I have a problem memorizing things.

Missing article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'problem'. Use 'a' for singular countable nouns. Suggestion: say 'a problem' or plural 'problems' if more than one.

× This is a feature that I have since I was a kid.

✓ This is a feature that I have had since I was a kid.

The sentence refers to a situation continuing from the past to the present, so the present perfect 'have had' should be used after 'since'. Use 'have had' + since + past time.

× I couldn't remember things I did and what people told me and it makes me like a dump.

✓ I couldn’t remember things I did and what people told me, and it made me feel dumb.

Mixed tenses: 'couldn't remember' is past, so 'makes' should be past 'made'. Also 'like a dump' is incorrect idiom and word choice; use 'feel dumb'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistency and use correct adjective 'dumb'.

× Yes, once I forgot something very important and that was my exam time which I had in the university and that time I forgot about what time I will be the exam and I went to university so late and I lose that exam.

✓ Yes, once I forgot something very important: the time of my university exam. I forgot what time the exam would be, so I went to the university very late and I lost that exam.

Multiple tense and word form errors: 'will be the exam' should be 'the exam would be' (past in reported time), 'lose' should be past 'lost'. Also reorder for clarity: 'the time of my university exam'. Use past tense consistently for past events.

× I work in a medical laboratory and because of that I have to memorize lots of things like in the name of patient or, uh, the test I have to do and how to do, umm, process of, uh, analyzing.

✓ I work in a medical laboratory, and because of that I have to memorize many things, such as the patient's name, the tests I have to perform, and the process of analysis.

Preposition and article issues: use 'the patient's name' (possessive) not 'in the name of patient'. 'Lots of' is informal; 'many' fits better. 'How to do' + noun should be 'how to perform' or 'the process of analysis'. Also use plural 'tests' if multiple. Reorder for clarity and correct collocations.

× However, I have problem in memorizing things, but unfortunately I can't remember important things and and because of that I haven't faced a major problems and thanks to God.

✓ However, I have a problem memorizing things, and unfortunately I can't remember some important things, but because of that I haven't faced any major problems, thank God.

Several errors: missing article 'a problem'; repeated 'and and'; 'haven't faced a major problems' mixes singular/plural and article — should be 'haven't faced any major problems'. 'Thanks to God' more natural as 'thank God'. Maintain present perfect 'haven't faced' correctly.