Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答内容总体清晰，但存在语法错误、冗长和重复表达。应更直接地给出主题句，简化句子结构，修正时态和介词错误，并使用连接词使回答更精炼自然。具体可：1）把主题句放在首句并保持简短；2）修正“every since”应为“ever since”或“since”；3）删除重复（如两次表达memorize）；4）控制在3-4句内。

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. Ever since I was a child, I could easily remember poems and facts because I practised them regularly. For example, when studying for exams I would repeat key points several times until they stuck.

提案: 回答叙事性强但表达有语法和用词不当（如“starting time”可以，但“got 0 on that course”口语化且较笼统；“stating”错误）。应更准确地描述事件和感受，使用连接词串联结果与反应，避免口语化俚语并纠正词汇错误。控制句子数量并保持逻辑顺序。

例: Yes, I once missed the start time of an important exam and failed that course. I felt devastated because I had prepared a lot. Since then, I always set multiple alarms and check the exam schedule in advance to avoid the same mistake.

提案: 回答内容涵盖面广，但句子结构不够紧凑，存在代词使用不当（“your”应为“my”）和重复表达。应先给出主题句，然后列举具体事项，用连接词（for example, also）并给出一两个具体细节或例子，使内容更具体。

例: I need to remember both small and big daily tasks. For example, I must note delivery times and meeting schedules, and also remember important dates like friends' birthdays. To manage this, I use a calendar app to set reminders.

提案: 回答表达思路清楚，但有语法错误、重复词语（"I'm I'm"）和不自然的比喻（"brain storage"）。应使用更地道的表达说明方法（e.g. make lists, set reminders），并用连接词解释原因和结果，同时减少冗长。

例: I used to rely on memory, but I found it unreliable, so now I write things down. I make a daily to-do list and set phone reminders for important appointments, which helps me avoid forgetting tasks.

× every since I was a kid it's never too hard for me to memorize knowledge points or poems that I'm just trying to be dedicated the whole time.

✓ ever since I was a kid it's never been too hard for me to memorize knowledge points or poems when I'm trying to be dedicated the whole time.

此处原句有拼写和时态问题："every since" 应为 "ever since"（固定搭配）；句中涉及从过去到现在的持续时间应使用现在完成时，所以 "it's never too hard" 改为 "it's never been too hard"。建议注意固定搭配与完成时的用法，表示从过去持续到现在的经历用现在完成时。

× So I missed the exam that time and got 0 on that course.

✓ So I missed the exam that time and got 0 in that course.

评分或课程成绩常用介词 "in" 而不是 "on"，此处并非过去分词问题但归类为过去分词/介词使用靠近意义，主要是介词搭配错误。建议记忆固定搭配：get 0 in a course。

× I don't want to do that again. So I tried to remember my stating.

✓ I didn't want to do that again. So I tried to remember my starting time.

原句时态和词语拼写错误：上下文讲过去发生的事情，应该用过去时 "I didn't want" 与后文一致；"stating" 为拼写错误，应为 "starting" 或更完整的 "starting time"。建议检查时态一致性并注意拼写。

× For trivial things like the time to pick up your delivery and the time of your meeting is all very important.

✓ For trivial things like the time to pick up a delivery and the time of a meeting, they are all very important.

原句结构混乱，主谓不一致：列举多个事项时需用复数主语或用独立从句；同时 "your" 可改为泛指 "a"/"a meeting"。建议重构句子并保持主谓一致。

× Also bigger things like the date of your friend's birthday is also very important to.

✓ Also bigger things, like the date of a friend's birthday, are also very important.

原句中主语为复数概念（"bigger things"），谓语应为复数 "are"；末尾 "to" 多余且不正确；并且用 "a friend's" 更通用。建议注意主谓一致并去掉多余介词。

× I used to try to memorize everything just up in my mind, but eventually I find that I'm I'm capable of doing that because of my brain storage is just isn't that much.

✓ I used to try to memorize everything just in my mind, but eventually I found that I'm not capable of doing that because my brain's storage just isn't that much.

存在多处问题："just up in my mind" 中的 "up" 多余，应为 "just in my mind"；时态应一致，讲过去的习惯后用过去发现："eventually I found"；"I'm I'm capable" 重复且语义相反，改为 "I'm not capable"；所有权和缩写用法改为 "my brain's storage" 或更自然的 "my memory capacity"。建议注意短语搭配、时态一致和避免重复。

× So nowadays I try to keep notes as much as possible, try to keep it down to the paper of everything I need to do every day.

✓ So nowadays I try to keep notes as much as possible, and I try to write everything I need to do every day down on paper.

原句中 "keep it down to the paper of everything" 结构不自然且介词错误，常用表达为 "write ... down on paper"。建议使用固定搭配 "write down" 和介词 "on paper"，并用连词连接两个并列动作。