Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答比较简短且有语法和表达错误（如“UMM”、“memory”用法不当），信息不够具体。建议：1) 用一到两句直接陈述你的能力；2) 用一两个具体例子或结果来支持陈述；3) 注意词汇和语法（memorize, remember, people/friends）；4) 控制在最多5句内并使用连接词如“because”或“so”。

例: Yes, I am good at memorising things because I have retained most of the course material since high school. For example, I can recall key formulas and lecture points without reviewing my notes, so I rarely struggle during exams.

提案: 回答结构混乱且不完整，语法错误和冗余表述较多（如“forgot to place the place I put my keys”），缺少具体细节和结果。建议：1) 开门见山描述事件；2) 提供具体细节（什么时候、后果、如何解决）；3) 使用连接词如“so”或“and then”来组织事件顺序；4) 保持句子完整。

例: Yes, once I forgot where I had left my house keys last year. My parents were worried because we couldn't enter the house, so we searched for an hour and finally found them under a sofa cushion.

提案: 回答包含要点但不够简洁，结尾不完整且细节不够具体。建议：1) 先给出总体话题句；2) 列举具体要记的事项（如生日、电话号码、約會、功課截止日期）；3) 用连接词如“for example”或“such as”并补充理由；4) 句子保持完整、最多五句。

例: I need to remember important dates and practical information in daily life. For example, I note down my parents' and friends' birthdays and their phone numbers so I can contact them quickly and not miss celebrations. I also remember assignment deadlines and main lecture points to stay organised.

提案: 回答表达不流畅、重复且结尾不完整（“I will find some”未说明）。建议：1) 先陈述主要方法；2) 具体说明工具和使用习惯（例如手机提醒、日历、纸质笔记、复习频率）；3) 使用连接词如“also”、“for example”来组织信息；4) 保持清晰简洁。

例: I rely on my phone's reminders and calendar to remember important tasks and events. I also keep a small paper notebook for quick notes and review them every evening, which helps me stay well prepared.

× Yes, I think I'm good at memorizing things since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I think I've been good at memorizing things since I was a child.

句子使用“since + 过去某个时间点”表示从过去某时持续到现在的动作或状态，应该用现在完成时（have/has + 过去分词）。原句用一般现在时“I'm good”不足以表达从过去持续到现在的状况。建议使用“I've been good at memorizing things since I was a child.” 来表示持续性。

× I think UMM can easily memory the knowledge from the class and I also can remember the friends.

✓ I think I can easily memorize the knowledge from class, and I can also remember my friends.

“memory”是名词，正确动词应为“memorize”。另外“UMM”疑为打字错误或不明词，应为“I”。“from the class”中“the”可省为“class”；“the friends”应为“my friends”。建议将名词改为动词并调整冠词和人称代词："I can easily memorize the knowledge from class, and I can also remember my friends."

× Yes. One time I forgot to place the place I put my keys and at that time my parents were really worried about something unfortunate would happen and at that time I was.

✓ Yes. One time I forgot where I had put my keys, and my parents were really worried that something unfortunate might happen, and I was too.

原句“forgot to place the place I put my keys”结构混乱，应表达“忘记把钥匙放在哪儿”，应使用过去完成时“had put”表示在过去另一个过去时间之前的动作。表达担心用“were worried that...”并用情态动词“might”表示可能性。句尾“and at that time I was”不完整，改为“and I was too”表示我也很担心。建议改为“I forgot where I had put my keys, and my parents were really worried that something unfortunate might happen, and I was too.”

× What do you need to remember in your daily life? Student: I think it's important to remember something special such as my parents and friends birthday and their phone number and also in classes I need to remember the knowledge and information that.

✓ I think it's important to remember special things such as my parents' and friends' birthdays and their phone numbers. Also, in classes I need to remember the knowledge and information taught.

原句中“parents and friends birthday”缺少所有格标记，应该用“parents' and friends' birthdays”。“phone number”若指多个人应为复数“phone numbers”。句尾“information that”不完整，应补全为“information taught”或“information from class”。此外注意可数名词复数形式和所有格的使用。建议改为“my parents' and friends' birthdays and their phone numbers”并补全句子。

× I usually keep a note in my phone and it can be a remember to me every day and to help me to get well prepared and also I will take notes in paper also I will find some.

✓ I usually keep a note on my phone and it can remind me every day and help me to be well prepared. I also take notes on paper and sometimes I find other methods.

“keep a note in my phone”介词用“on”更自然。短语“be a remember to me”错误，正确应为“remind me”。“to help me to get well prepared”语序冗余，改为“help me to be well prepared”。“take notes in paper”应为“on paper”。句尾“also I will find some”不完整，需补全为“find other methods/ways”。建议使用“remind”替代错误名词结构并修正介词与句子完整性。