Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời tương đối rõ ràng nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ (ví dụ: 'a pretty good' nên là 'pretty good' hoặc 'a pretty good memoriser') và một câu thiếu tự nhiên ('if I don't reveal it often' không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh nhớ). Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó dùng một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ với từ nối để mạch lạc. Hãy sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp, dùng cụm từ chính xác như 'use it often' hoặc 'review it regularly'.

例: Yes, I'm quite good at memorising short-term information, such as phone numbers and vocabulary for tests. However, when it comes to long-term memory, I tend to forget details if I don't review them regularly, so I try to revise important information every few days.

提案: Câu trả lời có cấu trúc tốt: mở đầu trả lời trực tiếp, kể một ví dụ cụ thể và nêu biện pháp khắc phục. Tuy nhiên có thể nâng cao bằng cách thêm một liên kết ngữ cảnh và một chi tiết cảm xúc ngắn để tự nhiên hơn, đồng thời thay từ lặp 'important' bằng từ khác để đa dạng vốn từ vựng.

例: Yes, I have. I once completely forgot my best friend’s birthday and felt terrible about it because I had been overwhelmed with schoolwork. Since then, I started writing all important dates in my calendar to make sure it doesn’t happen again.

提案: Ý tưởng rõ nhưng có nhiều lỗi diễn đạt và ngữ pháp (ví dụ 'Uh like', 'pull up with it if I could forget'). Cần trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề, sau đó liệt kê các ví dụ cụ thể với từ nối như 'for example' hoặc 'such as'. Tránh tiếng 'uh' khi nói và sửa câu cuối để rõ nghĩa: 'these small things can cause trouble if I forget them.'

例: I need to remember practical daily things, such as deadlines, class schedules and small tasks. For example, replying to emails or remembering to bring my wallet when I go out. These small items may seem trivial but they can cause problems if I forget them.

提案: Câu trả lời nêu được phương pháp cụ thể, nhưng có lỗi nhỏ ('A to do list app' nên 'a to-do list app'; 'nearly don't forget' không tự nhiên). Nên dùng từ nối để liên kết ý (e.g. 'also', 'so') và chỉnh lại câu cuối thành 'I almost never forget it' để tự nhiên hơn. Thêm một ví dụ ngắn về cách sử dụng nhắc nhở cũng giúp tăng điểm.

例: I usually set reminders on my phone and use a to-do list app to keep track of tasks. Also, for very important items I write a sticky note and put it on my laptop, so I see it frequently and almost never forget it.

× Well I think I'm a pretty good at memorizing short term things like phone numbers or vocabulary for tests, but when it comes to long term memory I sometimes forget details if I don't reveal it often.

✓ Well, I think I'm pretty good at memorizing short-term things like phone numbers or vocabulary for tests, but when it comes to long-term memory I sometimes forget details if I don't review them often.

The phrase 'a pretty good' is incorrect because 'pretty' modifies an adjective and does not require the article 'a' before 'pretty good'. Use 'pretty good' without 'a'. 'Short term' and 'long term' should be hyphenated when used as compound adjectives before a noun: 'short-term', 'long-term'. 'Reveal' is the wrong verb; the intended meaning is 'review' (to look over memory). Also 'details' is plural, so the pronoun must be plural 'them' not 'it'. Suggestions: remove the extra article, hyphenate compound adjectives, use the correct verb 'review', and match plural pronoun with plural noun.

× To be honest, yes. I once forgot my best friend's birthday and I felt so bad about it.

✓ To be honest, yes. I once forgot my best friend's birthday, and I felt so bad about it.

This sentence needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses. Adding the comma improves clarity and follows standard sentence structure rules. Suggestion: add a comma before 'and' when connecting two full clauses.

× It completely slipped my mind because I was too busy for schoolwork at that time.

✓ It completely slipped my mind because I was too busy with schoolwork at that time.

The preposition 'for' is not the correct collocation with 'busy' in this context. We say 'busy with schoolwork' to indicate being occupied by it. Tense is correct (past). Suggestion: use the correct preposition 'with'.

× I think I need to remember things like deadlines, class schedules, and sometimes even a small task.

✓ I think I need to remember things like deadlines, class schedules, and sometimes even small tasks.

'A small task' creates a mismatch with the general list context; using the plural 'small tasks' is more natural and consistent with 'things like'. Also articles are unnecessary when listing general items. Suggestion: use plural to match the general category.

× Uh like replying to e-mail or bringing something with me while going out.

✓ Uh, like replying to e-mail or bringing something with me when I go out.

The phrase 'while going out' is grammatically awkward; 'when I go out' is the clearer, correct expression for describing occasions. Also add a comma after 'Uh' for natural speech pause. Suggestion: use 'when I go out' to indicate the time of the action.

× These things seem small and unimportant but they pull up with it if I could forget.

✓ These things seem small and unimportant, but they become a problem if I forget them.

The original has several issues: 'pull up with it' is incorrect idiomatically; 'become a problem' or 'cause trouble' conveys meaning. 'If I could forget' is wrong mood and tense; use 'if I forget' for a conditional simple present referring to habitual possibility. Pronoun 'it' does not match plural 'these things', so use 'them'. Suggestions: replace idiom with 'become a problem', use correct conditional 'if I forget', and match pronoun number.

× I usually get reminders on my phone and also I use A to do list app.

✓ I usually get reminders on my phone, and I also use a to-do list app.

Capitalizing 'A' is incorrect; use lowercase 'a'. 'To do list' should be hyphenated as 'to-do list' when used as a noun phrase. Also include a comma before 'and' joining clauses. Suggestion: write 'a to-do list app' with correct hyphenation and article.

× If something is really important I write it on a sticky note and stick it on my laptop.

✓ If something is really important, I write it on a sticky note and stick it on my laptop.

A comma is needed after the conditional clause 'If something is really important' when it begins the sentence. This punctuation improves readability. Tense and word choice are otherwise correct. Suggestion: add the comma after the introductory conditional clause.

× That way I see it often and I nearly don't forget it.

✓ That way I see it often, and I almost never forget it.

The phrase 'nearly don't forget it' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use 'almost never forget it' to express that forgetting rarely happens. Also add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: replace 'nearly don't' with 'almost never' for natural negation and adverb placement.'