Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你回答直接，但语言不够自然且有语法和用词错误。建议：1) 开头用清晰的主题句（I’m not very good at memorising things.）。2) 用一两句具体解释并给出例子（I find long articles hard to remember, such as ...）。3) 避免重复与不必要填词（删掉多余的“since especially”或“it's difficult to me”改为更自然表达）。4) 注意时态与名词形式（memorise/memorising, memory）。

例: I’m not very good at memorising things. For example, I struggle to remember long articles in both Chinese and English because I quickly forget details. To cope, I usually break texts into small sections and review them several times.

提案: 回答提供了具体例子，但语法、时态和连贯性较弱。建议：1) 使用正确时态（过去发生的事用past tense：I forgot）。2) 精简并按时间顺序描述事件（Yesterday I forgot that we had arranged to play table tennis.）。3) 使用连接词使句子流畅（for example, because, so）。4) 减少填充词（umm, like）。

例: Yes, I have. For example, yesterday I forgot that my friends and I had planned to play table tennis, so I missed the game. I felt bad and now I set reminders on my phone to avoid that.

提案: 回答内容明确但表达不够精确，有重复与含糊时间表达。建议：1) 先给主题句（I need to remember my schedule and class times.）。2) 提供具体细节并用清晰的时间表达（on Mondays at 12 pm or at noon）。3) 用连接词列举其他需要记住的事项（such as deadlines, appointments）。4) 避免口头语和模糊词（umm, something like this）。

例: I need to remember my schedule and class times. For instance, I have lectures on Mondays at 12 pm, and I also need to remember assignment deadlines and meetings with tutors.

提案: 回答方法明确且实用，但语法与表达有小错误与重复。建议：1) 开头用清晰主题句（I usually write important things down.）。2) 说明具体工具与方式并给出原因（in a small notebook or on my phone because it’s convenient）。3) 用连接词解释优点（so I don’t forget them, and I can check anytime）。4) 删除重复词并注意动词形式（I can’t forget → I don’t forget / I can't afford to forget）。

例: I usually write important things down in a small notebook or on my phone. That way I won’t forget them, and I can check the notes anytime when I need to.

× Well, I don't think I'm good at memories since especially memorize articles like Chinese or English.

✓ Well, I don't think I'm good at memorizing, especially memorizing articles in Chinese or English.

句子使用了名词复数“memories”与动名词短语搭配不当，应使用动名词memorizing表示“记忆（动作）”。另外短语顺序和介词使用需要调整：用“especially memorizing articles in Chinese or English”更自然。建议使用动名词形式并调整词序，使表达清晰。

× I can't remember the long articles, It's difficult to me.

✓ I can't remember long articles; it's difficult for me.

原句中不需要定冠词“the”在泛指“长文章”时应用“long articles”。另外“It’s difficult to me”不地道，正确为“It's difficult for me”。建议去掉不必要的冠词并用固定搭配“difficult for someone”。

× Well, yes, I usually forgot some important things like just yesterday I forgot umm play with my friends, umm, we decide to play the table tennis, but I forgot these things so.

✓ Well, yes, I usually forget some important things. Just yesterday I forgot to play with my friends; we had decided to play table tennis, but I forgot.

句中时态混用和动词形式错误：描述习惯应使用一般现在时“usually forget”，而不是过去式“forgot”。“forgot play”不正确，应为“forgot to play”。“we decide”描述过去的计划应为过去完成或一般过去“we had decided”或“we decided”。此外“the table tennis”不需要定冠词。建议保持时态一致，使用正确的动词不定式结构和恰当的冠词。

× Well, like in my daily life I need to remember what kind of time I need to go to the lectures and have a class like maybe Mondays, umm, 12 AM, something like this.

✓ Well, in my daily life I need to remember what time I need to go to lectures and have classes, for example, on Mondays at 12 a.m.

“what kind of time”不自然，应为“what time”。“go to the lectures”通常可简化为“go to lectures”；“have a class”复数更合适“have classes”。时间表达应使用介词“on”表示星期天数（on Mondays）和“at”表示具体时间（at 12 a.m.）。建议使用标准时间和日期介词。

× Well, for important things I can't forgot it, so I will write write them in the papers or in a notebook which is very small and easy to carry on.

✓ Well, for important things I can't forget them, so I write them on paper or in a small, easy-to-carry notebook.

“can't forgot”时态和形式错误，应为“can't forget”（不定式/原形/动词现在时）。“write write”是多余重复，应为“write”。“in the papers”不自然，常用短语为“on paper”或“on the paper”。“carry on”在这里不需要，改为“easy-to-carry”。代词“it”指代错误，应为复数“them”。建议使用正确的动词形式、恰当的介词和一致的代词指代。