Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中注意句子简洁与结构清晰：避免过多填充词（如“umm”）并用一到两句直接给出观点，再用具体细节支持。可改进连词使用，使衔接更自然，并替换重复或不地道的表达（如“objects”可改为“items”）。此外控制答案在3–5句内，保持流畅度。

例: No, I'm not good at memorising things. I usually write down important items on a shopping list so I don't forget them. For example, when I go to the supermarket I check my list for vegetables and toiletries to make sure I buy everything I need.

提案: 注意动词时态与语法正确性，避免语法错误和大小写错误（如“need”应为“needed”，“Alert”不应大写）。回答时先用一句话直接回答，然后用一两个句子具体说明情况、原因与结果，使用连词如“because”或“so”。

例: Yes, I have. Once I needed to attend an important meeting and I added it to my calendar, but the reminder didn't go off, so I missed the meeting. Since then I double-check alerts and set a second notification.

提案: 回答内容需更准确和用词恰当，避免重复和错误拼写（如“pay in the bill”应为“pay bills”，“foam”可能是误词）。先给出总述（例如“bills and appointments”），然后列举具体项目并说明如何提醒自己，使用连接词如“for example”。

例: I need to remember regular payments and appointments. For example, I keep track of utility bills such as gas, water and electricity, as well as my rent and doctor appointments, by adding them to my calendar with reminders.

提案: 简化表达并修正语法（如“put into the calendar”应为“putting them in my calendar”），避免语气词（如“uh”）并用更自然的衔接词（如“so”或“therefore”）。回答时先陈述方法，然后说明具体做法或效果，句子保持2–4句内。

例: I remember important things by writing them down and setting alerts in my calendar. For instance, I create to-do lists for daily tasks and set phone reminders so I don't miss payments or appointments.

× I believe I have a bad memory, that is why I always have to write down important things on a piece of paper to help me memorize.

✓ I believe I have a bad memory; that is why I always have to write down important things on a piece of paper to help me remember.

句中使用的動詞“memorize”在英式/口語中可接受，但與前半句“have a bad memory”連接時更自然用“remember”。此外，用分號或連接詞分隔兩個並列分句更合適。建議用“remember”來表達“記住”，並使用分號或連接詞改善句子連貫性。

× Yes, I do have such experience in the past.

✓ Yes, I have had such an experience in the past.

原句時態不正確。要表達過去曾經有過的經驗，應使用現在完成式“have had”。同時可在“experience”前加不定冠詞“an”。建議使用現在完成時來描述過去發生且與現在相關的經驗。

× I remember there was one time that I need to attend an important meeting.

✓ I remember there was one time when I needed to attend an important meeting.

句子中描述過去的情況，主句用過去時“was”，從句也應使用過去時“needed”而不是現在時“need”。因此將動詞改為過去式以保持時態一致。

× However, it does not Alert me at the day of the event.

✓ However, it did not alert me on the day of the event.

此處在談論過去的事件，助動詞和主要動詞需用過去式“did not alert”。另外，介詞用“on the day of the event”更自然。注意“alert”不應大寫。建議將整句改為一般過去時並修正介詞和大小寫。

× Well, the most important thing I need to remember is to pay in the bill different bills like gas, water, hydro, foam and rental.

✓ Well, the most important things I need to remember are to pay the different bills like gas, water, electricity and rent.

原句中冠詞和名詞單複數不一致：“the most important thing”後列舉多項應使用複數“things”或重寫從句；“pay in the bill”用法錯誤，應為“pay the bills”或“pay the bill”；“hydro”和“foam”用詞不准確，應改為“electricity” (或用地方用法“hydro”)，而“rental”應為“rent”。建議調整主語複數、修正動詞搭配和名詞詞彙，使語意清晰。

× I always try to remember important things by writing them down on a piece of paper or put into the calendar and set an alert.

✓ I always try to remember important things by writing them down on a piece of paper or putting them into the calendar and setting an alert.

在“by”後應接動名詞(verb + -ing)，因此“put”與“set”需改為“putting”和“setting”。此外，保留代詞“them”以保持賓語一致。建議在“by”之後使用動名詞形式以符合語法。

× I think, uh, this is an effective way for me to remember all the things I don't have because I do not have a good memory and cannot simply rely on my brain.

✓ I think this is an effective way for me to remember all the things I can't because I do not have a good memory and cannot simply rely on my brain.

原句“remember all the things I don't have”語意不明，應為“remember all the things I can't (remember)”或“remember things I would otherwise forget”。此外逗號和語氣詞“uh”可省略以使句子更流暢。建議改為“I think this is an effective way for me to remember things I would otherwise forget”以表達原意。