Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较直接，但存在语法错误、冗余和不自然用法。建议：1) 注意时态一致（“retold”应与“could”搭配注意结构）并使用更自然短语；2) 精简冗余信息，最多三到四句；3) 使用连接词使陈述更连贯，并加入简单具体细节如记忆方法。示例句型：先给主题句，然后用一两个具体例子支持，最后可加一句当前情况。

例: Yes, I’m fairly good at memorising. For instance, when I was in primary school I could quickly learn a short article and then recite it to classmates. Nowadays I can still remember several telephone numbers by repeating them a few times.

提案: 表达混乱且有明显语法和词汇错误，内容不够具体。建议：1) 用正确表达描述事件（例如“I missed the address”或“I wrote down the wrong address”）；2) 明确说明后果和学到的教训，使用连接词（so, because, therefore）；3) 控制在三到四句内。

例: Yes, once I wrote down the wrong address for an important meeting, so I arrived late. I felt very embarrassed and guilty about it. Since then I always double-check addresses and set reminders on my phone to avoid the same mistake.

提案: 内容方向正确但措辞不准确且句子不够流畅。建议：1) 使用更自然的名词短语（lecture timetable → class schedule）；2) 修正措辞错误（attend lessons on time; find the right classroom; course materials）；3) 用连接词组织两点并给出具体做法。

例: I need to remember my class schedule so that I can attend lessons on time and find the right classroom. I also have to remember course materials and assignments, so I review lecture notes and handouts before each class.

提案: 回答基本能传达意思但结构松散，存在语法错误和多余短语。建议：1) 合并信息，去掉停顿词（Uh）并用一两句清晰表达记忆方法；2) 注意单复数和固定搭配（important things; check my assignment list）；3) 可加入具体习惯细节（时间点、频率）。

例: I usually take notes on my laptop for important things and review them before going to bed. I also check my assignment list on the computer every evening to make sure I haven’t missed anything.

× Yes, I have gotten the address of an important meeting.

✓ Yes, I got the address of an important meeting.

错误类型：动词过去分词/现在完成时用法不当。原句使用“have gotten”表示现在完成时，但后文“So at that day I was late for this meeting.”指出动作发生在过去的具体时间（那一天），应使用一般过去时。建议把现在完成时改为一般过去时：用“got”。此外，英语中美式可用“gotten”，英式通常用“got”；在叙述过去具体事件时用一般过去更合适。

× So at that day I was late for this meeting.

✓ So on that day I was late for the meeting.

错误类型：句子结构和介词使用不当。短语“at that day”不正确，应使用“on that day”。此外“this meeting”在叙述过去事件时应用“the meeting”更自然。建议使用“on that day”并将“this”改为“the”。

× I felt very guilted and and also learn a lesson from it that I show the techniques for those important.

✓ I felt very guilty and also learned a lesson from it: I should show the techniques for those important things.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用、时态和句子结构错误。原句用“guilted”是错误的派生形式，应为形容词“guilty”。句中“and and”有重复，且后半句时态应与叙述过去的主句一致，用过去式“learned”。原句的结构和表达含糊（“I show the techniques for those important”不通顺），建议改为更明确的表达，如“I should show the techniques for those important things”或重写为更自然的句子。

× The first thing I need to remember is my lecture timetable, which can help me to attend lessons in right time and write classrooms.

✓ The first thing I need to remember is my lecture timetable, which can help me attend lessons on time and find the right classroom.

错误类型：介词使用及词汇选择不当。短语“in right time”应为“on time”。“write classrooms”是不正确的动词，应为“find the right classroom”（找到正确的教室）或“get to the right classroom”。建议改用固定搭配“attend lessons on time”和“find the right classroom”。

× What's more, I also need to remember across materials and to make it I always review it before class.

✓ What's more, I also need to remember course materials, and to do that I always review them before class.

错误类型：介词/词汇使用和代词指代错误。原句“remember across materials”不通顺，应为“remember course materials”或“remember the materials”。“to make it”用法错误，应为“to do that”。代词“it”指代模糊，materials为复数，故用“them”。建议改为“remember course materials, and to do that I always review them before class.”

× Uh, I usually take notes on my laptop for those important thing and before going to bed and I always check the assignment list in my computer.

✓ Uh, I usually take notes on my laptop for those important things, and before going to bed I always check the assignment list on my computer.

错误类型：动词+ing形式/名词单复数与介词使用不当。原句“those important thing”中“thing”应为复数“things”。句子中“and before going to bed and I always”结构混乱，需调整为连贯的从句顺序。介词“in my computer”不自然，应为“on my computer”。建议改为“...important things, and before going to bed I always check the assignment list on my computer.”