Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a brief reason or example using linking words. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'business meetings', 'remember things').

例: Not really. I usually struggle with memory because I have a busy schedule, so I often forget social and work appointments. To cope, I set phone alerts and write quick notes to myself.

提案: Organize the answer: give a clear topic sentence, explain what happened with specific details, and use correct tense and natural phrasing. Avoid unclear parts (e.g., 'we left later').

例: Yes. Once, despite being friends for two years, I suddenly couldn't remember her name during a conversation. I felt embarrassed, apologised, and asked gently for her name again; afterwards we joked about it and continued our chat.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and combine sentences to sound natural. Add one specific example and a linking phrase for coherence. Use plural forms where appropriate ('appointments with friends or doctors').

例: Mainly I need to remember my daily schedule, especially appointments. For instance, I always note the time and place of meetings so I don't miss appointments with friends or doctors.

提案: Structure the answer with a topic sentence followed by specific methods and a linking phrase. Fix small grammar errors ('take a note on my phone or on paper'). Mention one preferred method and why it works.

例: I use a few simple methods to remember important things. For example, I set phone reminders and calendar events, and I also jot quick notes on my phone or on paper, because seeing a written reminder helps me stay on track.

× No, I don't think I'm good at memorizing things.

✓ No, I don't think I'm good at memorizing things.

No change needed; sentence is correct. Kept as a control example.

× For example, I often forget to meet my friends or have business meeting.

✓ For example, I often forget to meet my friends or have business meetings.

Use plural 'business meetings' because 'meetings' is countable and the sentence refers to occasions in general. Suggestion: use plural for repeated or habitual events (business meetings).

× I need to try remembering my things.

✓ I need to try to remember my things.

After 'try' when referring to making an effort, the infinitive form 'to remember' is preferred. Using 'remembering' would emphasize experimenting with a method. Suggestion: use 'try to + base verb' for attempts to do something.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I have.

Missing comma after interjection; grammatically sentence is fine for present perfect. Correction adds punctuation. Suggestion: include comma after 'Yes' in written English.

× Once I forgot my best friend's name when we've known for two years.

✓ Once I forgot my best friend's name even though we had known each other for two years.

Mixed tenses and wrong pronoun use: 'we've known' (present perfect) conflicts with past event 'forgot'; also missing reflexive structure 'each other'. Use past perfect 'had known' to show prior duration before the forgetting. Suggestion: use past perfect for a state that existed before another past event and include 'each other' for reciprocal knowing.

× I felt sorry to her so I apologized and asked her name again, so we left later.

✓ I felt sorry for her, so I apologized and asked her name again, and then we left.

Use 'sorry for someone' not 'sorry to someone'; punctuation and conjunctions adjusted for clarity ('and then' or 'later'). Suggestion: use 'sorry for' and connect clauses clearly with commas and conjunctions.

× I need to remember my schedule correctly in my daily life.

✓ I need to remember my schedule accurately in my daily life.

'Correctly' is grammatical but 'accurately' is more natural collocated with 'remember a schedule'. Suggestion: choose collocations that are commonly used (remember a schedule accurately).

× To avoid the situation that I miss my appointments with my friends or doctor.

✓ This is to avoid situations where I miss my appointments with friends or my doctor.

Original is a sentence fragment and awkwardly phrased. 'To avoid the situation that' is unnatural and missing subject. Make it a complete sentence and pluralize 'situations' and include article 'my' before 'doctor'. Suggestion: ensure complete sentence with subject and verb and use natural phrasing 'situations where'.

× There are several ways I try to remember important things.

✓ There are several ways I try to remember important things.

Sentence is correct; no article error. Kept for completeness.

× For example, I use reminders on my phone to make sure I'm on time, and I usually take a note my phone or paper.

✓ For example, I use reminders on my phone to make sure I'm on time, and I usually take a note on my phone or on paper.

Missing preposition 'on' before 'my phone' and before 'paper' for clarity. Also 'take a note' is acceptable but better as 'take notes' for habitual action. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('on my phone'/'on paper') and consider plural 'take notes' for general habit.