Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, grammatically correct, and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + short reason), then add one or two specific supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid unnecessary repetition and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'I really enjoy it', 'I take photos', 'I keep a diary').

例: Yes, I enjoy remembering important moments because I like to preserve memories. For example, I take photos and keep a daily diary, so I can revisit important events later.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear reason and one example. Use linking words like 'but' or 'so' correctly, and avoid fillers and repeated words. Correct tense and word choice will improve clarity (e.g., 'I have forgotten important things' not 'at at first').

例: Yes, I have. For instance, I once missed a dentist appointment because I forgot it, so I now use reminders on my phone to avoid that happening again.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence listing main categories, then give two specific examples with linking words. Reduce hesitations and use correct noun phrases (e.g., 'many things' not 'too much things'). Be specific about the details you remember.

例: I need to remember several things each day, such as important appointments and study-related tasks. For example, I note the time of meetings and key bullet points from my course lectures in a notebook.

提案: Good structure and clear methods. To improve, combine sentences for fluency and add a brief reason or result. Use linking words like 'so' or 'and' smoothly and avoid capitalisation errors. Be specific about how you use tools (e.g., set alerts, prioritize tasks).

例: I use my phone calendar to set alerts for important events, and I also make a daily to-do list to prioritise tasks, so I rarely miss anything important.

× Yes, I think I really into it and I learn to taking photos and writing Diaries to pros to pres preserve memories and I always record it.

✓ Yes, I think I'm really into it, and I have learned to take photos and write diaries to preserve memories, and I always record them.

Multiple issues: missing auxiliary verb and contraction (subject-verb agreement/third person singular — Grammar Problem Type ID 2 and 27), incorrect verb forms ('learn to taking' should be 'learned to take' — Past tense/verb + -ing issues, IDs 5 and 8), incorrect capitalization ('Diaries' should be lowercase — adjective/noun form but not in list; treat as general error), redundant words ('pros to pres' unclear and removed), and pronoun agreement ('it' -> 'them' to match plural 'memories' — Incorrect use of pronouns ID 12). Suggestion: use contraction 'I'm', use past or present perfect 'have learned' for experience, use base verb after 'learn to', and ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents.

× Definitely, but because my memory is not very good and at at first I always forget something, so then I try to study how to preserve my memories.

✓ Definitely, but because my memory is not very good I often forget things at first, so I try to learn how to preserve my memories.

Problems: redundant 'at at' and awkward temporal phrasing. 'I always forget something' is incorrect for habitual occasional forgetting; use 'often forget things' (singular/plural and adverb placement — IDs 1 and 20). 'Try to study' is unnatural; 'try to learn' fits better (verb choice but maps to verb form issues ID 6). Remove unnecessary 'then'. Suggestion: simplify sentence, correct adverb placement, use plural 'things' for general items.

× Well, there's too much things I need to remember, uh, for example, an important appointment and, uh, some, uh, some bullet points in my courses or the other, uh, details in my daily life.

✓ Well, there are too many things I need to remember, for example an important appointment, some bullet points in my courses, or other details of my daily life.

Singular/plural and 'there is/are' agreement: 'there's' + plural 'things' is incorrect (There be issue and singular/plural issue — IDs 3 and 1). Use 'there are' and 'too many' with countable plural nouns. 'the other details' is awkward; use 'other details of my daily life'. Suggestion: match 'there are' with plural nouns and use 'many' for countable items.

× Well I always use my phone calendar to write down something important and when the time is coming my phone will remind me.

✓ Well, I always use my phone calendar to write down important things, and when the time comes my phone reminds me.

Tense and word choice: 'write down something important' is acceptable but 'important things' is more natural (quantifier/adjective choice ID 14/13). 'When the time is coming' is awkward; use present simple 'when the time comes' for scheduled events (present tense issue ID 6). Use present simple 'reminds' rather than 'will remind' for routine actions (future tense misuse ID 7). Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and natural collocations.

× And I also make A to do list every day to help me remember something.

✓ And I also make a to-do list every day to help me remember things.

Article and quantifier issues: 'A to do list' should be 'a to-do list' with lowercase and hyphens (article error ID 22 and article capitalization), and 'something' is better as plural 'things' for general items (quantifier/plural issue ID 14/1). Suggestion: use 'a to-do list' and 'things' for general reminders.