Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and structure your response with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "so") and avoid hesitation sounds. Replace vague phrases with specific actions and correct verb forms.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, when I have dictations and haven't revised beforehand, I often memorise the material on the bus by repeating key words and dates to myself, so I can recall them at school.

提案: Begin with a direct answer, use correct tense and grammar, and give a specific example that explains why you forgot the item. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and keep the answer to no more than four sentences.

例: Yes, I have. For example, once I forgot to hand in an important assignment because I was very busy and relaxed when I got home, so I stopped thinking about it. Because I had not set a reminder, I only remembered the next day.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence, then give two clear, specific examples of things you must remember. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "presentations", "deadlines") and correct collocations instead of awkward phrases.

例: I need to remember school-related deadlines and tasks. For example, I must study for quizzes scheduled for the next day and prepare class presentations or PowerPoint slides for group projects.

提案: Good structure and clear method. Improve by using correct verb tenses and smoother linking words (e.g., "then", "after that"). Add a brief reason why this method works to show reflection. Keep it concise and natural.

例: I write important tasks on memo slips and keep them in my pencil case. Then, when I get home and take out my pens or keys, I see the notes and start those tasks first, which helps me avoid forgetting them because the notes are always visible.

× I think yes, because when I have the dictations in the morning and I didn't have any revision before today and I just start memorizing on on the way to go to school, maybe when I was traveling on my school bus and I start varizing things and I could definitely memorize.

✓ I think so, because when I have dictations in the morning and I haven't done any revision before today, I usually start memorizing on the way to school; for example, when I am traveling on the school bus I start revising things and I can definitely memorize them.

Mixed and incorrect tenses (present/past) and verb forms are used. Use present simple or present perfect to describe habitual actions and recent states: 'have dictations' (present simple), 'haven't done any revision' (present perfect), 'start memorizing'/'start revising' (present simple for habitual action), 'can definitely memorize' (modal + base verb). Also corrected repeated word 'on on' and misspelling 'varizing' to 'revising'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense for habitual routines (present simple) and use present perfect for actions affecting the present.

× Oh yes, sometimes when I was busy I would forgot something that's so important.

✓ Oh yes, sometimes when I was busy I would forget something that was very important.

Incorrect past tense form 'forgot' after conditional 'would' — 'would' should be followed by base verb 'forget'. Also 'that's so important' mixes present and past; change to 'that was very important' to keep past reference. Suggestion: after 'would' use base verb; keep time reference consistent.

× Maybe someone reminds me to do after school or maybe someone call me to do something when I back to my home and I when I go to home I feel relaxed so I always forgot the things they have told me.

✓ Maybe someone reminds me to do it after school, or maybe someone calls me to do something when I get back home; when I go home I feel relaxed, so I always forget the things they told me.

Multiple errors: subject-verb agreement ('someone calls' not 'call'), missing object 'it' after 'to do', incorrect verb forms 'back to my home' -> 'get back home' and 'forgot' should be present simple 'forget' to match habitual meaning, 'they have told me' simplified to 'they told me' for clarity. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with singular subjects and use natural collocations like 'get back home'; choose tense consistent with habitual action.

× I will write it on my memo sheets and I will put these memo sheets in my pencil case.

✓ I write it on my memo sheets and put the memo sheets in my pencil case.

Using future 'will' is unnatural for describing habitual procedure; present simple is preferred. Prepositions 'on my memo sheets' and 'in my pencil case' are correct, but simplifying tense improves clarity. Suggestion: use present simple for routines.

× And when I back to home, I have to do my homework and when I take out the pens or keys, I will see the tasks I have to do on my memory sheets and I will start doing those things first.

✓ When I get back home, I have to do my homework, and when I take out my pens or keys I see the tasks I have to do on my memo sheets and I start doing those things first.

'I back to home' is incorrect; use 'I get back home'. Future 'will' is unnecessary for habitual actions; use present simple 'see' and 'start'. 'Memory sheets' changed to 'memo sheets' for consistency. Suggestion: use correct verb for returning home and present simple for regular routines.