Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and word choice, avoid unnecessary phrases, and limit to up to 5 sentences. Use linking words if adding details and provide a brief example of your method.

例: Yes, I am fairly good at remembering things. I often write down important details in a small notebook, which helps me recall facts later. For example, when I study, I jot down key dates and terms and review them before sleep, so I rarely forget important information.

提案: Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary. Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific example and a consequence. Avoid vague or incorrect words (e.g., 'ever' misused, 'Metairie' unclear). Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, during a high school exam I once forgot key details from a reading passage, which made me lose marks and feel frustrated.

提案: Answer directly, correct awkward phrasing, and add a brief supporting detail. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' appropriately, and avoid idioms that may be unclear. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

例: I need to remember my work tasks and deadlines. Because forgetting a task could cause problems at work, I use a daily to-do list and set reminders on my phone to make sure everything gets done.

提案: Be specific and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence describing your method, then add one concrete detail about how you use it. Correct grammar and avoid repetition; use linking words like 'also' or 'for example'.

例: I remember important things by writing them in a small notebook and using my phone's reminders. For example, I write tasks as soon as they appear and set an alarm to review them later, which helps me avoid forgetting important duties.

× Yes, of course, I'm quite advanced at remembering something.

✓ Yes, of course, I'm quite good at remembering things.

The phrase 'advanced at remembering something' is unnatural; use the adjective 'good' with the verb 'remember' and pluralize 'things' for general ability. Suggestion: use 'good at remembering things' for fluent, idiomatic expression.

× This is not because my intelligent brain, this is because I always bring my book to notice the details.

✓ This is not because I have an intelligent brain; it is because I always bring a notebook to note the details.

Original sentence has incorrect structure and word choices: 'because my intelligent brain' lacks a verb, 'bring my book to notice the details' is unidiomatic. Use 'have an intelligent brain' if intended, but more natural to contrast with 'it is because', and 'bring a notebook to note the details' uses correct verb and noun. Use a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity.

× So this activity is not a rocket science.

✓ So this activity is not rocket science.

Article 'a' before 'rocket science' is incorrect because 'rocket science' is an uncountable idiomatic noun phrase meaning something very difficult. Remove 'a' to be grammatical: 'not rocket science'.

× Yes, I ever forgotten something important, especially when I'm taking a test in the high school.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten something important, especially when I was taking a test in high school.

Use present perfect 'have forgotten' for past experiences; 'ever' is used in questions or with negative contexts and is unnecessary here. Also tense should match: 'was taking' or 'used to take' for past events; drop 'the' before 'high school' when speaking generally.

× Sometime I forget the details of the Metairie that appeared in the text so that it make me feel unpleasant.

✓ Sometimes I forget the details of the material that appeared in the text, so it makes me feel unpleasant.

Use 'Sometimes' (adverb) not 'Sometime'. 'Metairie' appears to be a typo for 'material'. Use 'the material' or 'material' depending on context; keep verb agreement: 'it makes' (singular subject 'it') and add a comma before 'so'. 'So that' is incorrect here; use 'so' to indicate result.

× The most important thing that I need to remember is my work task.

✓ The most important thing I need to remember is my work tasks.

'Work task' is countable and often plural when referring to duties; use 'work tasks' for general responsibilities. Also omit unnecessary 'that' for a more natural relative clause: 'The most important thing I need to remember...'. If referring to one specific task, 'my work task' could be kept, but plural is more natural.

× If a task slips in my mind, I could be blamed by my boss or even face a punishment so that I should burn the midnight oil to get my job.

✓ If a task slips my mind, I could be blamed by my boss or even face punishment, so I should burn the midnight oil to finish my work.

'Slips in my mind' is unidiomatic; use 'slips my mind'. 'Face a punishment' usually omits 'a' and is 'face punishment'. 'So that I should' is incorrect sequence; use 'so I should' to express consequence. 'Get my job' is unclear; use 'finish my work' or 'keep my job' depending on meaning.

× As I said before, I always remember important thing by keeping a note in my hand whenever or wherever I go.

✓ As I said before, I always remember important things by keeping a note in my hand wherever I go.

Use plural 'important things' for general items. 'Keeping a note in my hand' is awkward; better 'keeping a note in my hand' may be acceptable but 'keeping a note with me' or 'writing notes' is more natural. Also 'whenever or wherever I go' is redundant; 'wherever I go' suffices.

× Furthermore, this thing should assist me a lot in remembering important or crucial things.

✓ Furthermore, this method helps me a lot in remembering important or crucial things.

'This thing' is vague; use 'this method' or 'this habit' to refer to note-taking. 'Should assist me' implies uncertainty; if habitual, use present simple 'helps me'. Be specific and consistent in pronoun/reference choice.