Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), use correct tense and plural/singular forms, and give one specific example. Keep answers to 2–4 sentences. Add a linking phrase when giving examples (for example/for instance).

例: I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, I often forget my daily schedule, such as classes or appointments, so I sometimes miss meetings. Because of this, I now try to write tasks down to avoid forgetting them.

提案: Give a direct, complete response with correct grammar and a clear detail about the incident. Use linking words to explain feelings and consequences. Avoid incomplete sentences and vague endings.

例: Yes, I once forgot a close friend's birthday. I felt very embarrassed because I missed a surprise party, and as a result I apologised and gave her a small gift to make up for it.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific details and use correct verb forms. Use linking words (for example, such as) to list tasks and explain why they matter. Keep it concise and natural.

例: I need to remember my study and work commitments, especially my daily schedule. For example, I have online classes and meetings that I must attend on time, so I set reminders to make sure I don't miss them.

提案: Explain your method clearly with correct word choice and grammar. Use one or two sentences: state the method and give a brief example of how you use it. Avoid confusion (us/claims/test) and repetition.

例: I use my smartphone to remember important things. For instance, I set calendar alerts and to-do notifications for exam dates or meetings, so my phone reminds me well in advance.

× Honestly, I'm not really good at memorizing things, uh, so I often forgot, umm, many things in my life.

✓ Honestly, I'm not really good at memorizing things, so I often forget many things in my life.

The sentence mixes present ('I'm not really good') with past tense 'forgot'. Use present simple 'forget' to match the ongoing general situation. Advice: Keep tense consistent for habitual actions; use 'I often forget' for habits.

× Uh, for example, I usually forgot my, uh, schedule, study, and maybe anything else.

✓ For example, I usually forget my schedule, study tasks, and other things.

'Usually' indicates a habitual action, so the past tense 'forgot' is incorrect. Use present simple 'forget'. Also adjust nouns for clarity: 'study tasks' and 'other things'.

× Yes, I have forgotten something important especially in uh.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten something important recently.

The phrase 'especially in uh' is incomplete and awkward. 'Recently' fits with the present perfect 'have forgotten' to indicate a past event with present relevance. Keep sentences complete and clear.

× Recently I forgot my friend birthday and I feel so bad because I don't remember her birthday so I can.

✓ Recently I forgot my friend's birthday and I felt so bad because I didn't remember her birthday.

This sentence mixes tenses and has structural errors. 'Friend birthday' needs possessive 'friend's'. If referring to a specific past event, use past simple ('forgot', 'felt', 'didn't remember') for consistency. The ending 'so I can' is incomplete and removed.

× All my study and work are very important, so I always need to remember my schedule.

✓ All my studies and work are very important, so I always need to remember my schedule.

'Study' as a noun meaning courses or academic work is usually plural 'studies' when general. Use correct noun form to match meaning. Tense and structure are otherwise fine.

× I attended meetings on online programs or on e-learning of my school.

✓ I attend meetings on online platforms or via my school's e-learning system.

Mixed tenses and prepositions: 'attended' (past) conflicts with general habit; use present 'attend' or keep past consistently. 'On online programs' is awkward; 'on online platforms' or 'via e-learning' is natural. Use 'my school's e-learning system' for clarity.

× Oh, I use my technology. I use my smartphone to remind us and set our claims to bring it for me to remember the the exactly test in the day I have to.

✓ I use my smartphone to remind me and set alarms to help me remember the exact time of a test on the day I have it.

Pronouns are incorrect: 'remind us' and 'our claims' should be 'remind me' and 'set alarms'. The phrase 'bring it for me' is ungrammatical; use 'to help me'. 'The the exactly test in the day I have to' has word order and duplication errors; correct to 'the exact time of a test on the day I have it'. Also maintain consistent present tense for habitual actions.