Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I'm not really like eating chocolate'. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc đúng và câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I don't really like eating chocolate because it's too sweet for me, and it's not my favorite dessert.

提案: Câu trả lời cần sử dụng cấu trúc ngữ pháp đúng và tránh lỗi như 'I'm not often eat chocolate'. Bạn nên dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn.

例: I don't often eat chocolate; I usually have it only on special occasions like holidays or when my friends give it to me as a gift.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý thì động từ và số nhiều, ví dụ 'I often ate chocolate' và 'chocolate flavors'. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because it tasted sweet, and many cakes and candies had chocolate flavor. However, I don't like it much now.

提案: Câu trả lời cần chính xác về ngữ pháp số nhiều và dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lặp từ.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a delicious flavor that is both sweet and slightly bitter, and it is commonly used in desserts.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'Even I don't like chocolate'. Hãy dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và dùng từ vựng chính xác.

例: Although I don't like chocolate much, my favorite flavor is milk chocolate because I find original chocolate too bitter.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, ví dụ 'chocolate as a gift is a good option'. Hãy dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: Personally, I think chocolate is a good gift option, especially for people who really enjoy it, because it has a smooth and creamy taste that makes people happy.

× I'm not really like eating chocolate, umm because for me chocolate is not my favorite dessert and sometimes I feel chocolate is being too sweet for me so I'm not headed but I don't really like it.

✓ I don't really like eating chocolate, umm because for me chocolate is not my favorite dessert and sometimes I feel chocolate is too sweet for me so I'm not keen but I don't really like it.

The phrase 'I'm not really like eating chocolate' is incorrect because 'like' as a verb should be followed by the base form or gerund without 'am'. The correct form is 'I don't really like eating chocolate'. Also, 'headed' is incorrect here; the intended word is likely 'keen', meaning interested. Additionally, 'chocolate is being too sweet' should be 'chocolate is too sweet' because 'being' is unnecessary here.

× Really, I'm not often eat chocolate, I just eat it in a special occasion like date holidays, when Halloween's or when my friends give me a gift as a chocolate.

✓ Really, I don't often eat chocolate, I just eat it on special occasions like holidays, Halloween, or when my friends give me chocolate as a gift.

The phrase 'I'm not often eat chocolate' is incorrect because 'am' should not be used with 'eat' in this context. The correct form is 'I don't often eat chocolate'. Also, 'in a special occasion' should be 'on special occasions' because 'on' is the correct preposition for occasions and the plural form is appropriate here. 'Date holidays' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'holidays' is sufficient. 'When Halloween's' should be 'Halloween' without the possessive 's'. 'Give me a gift as a chocolate' should be 'give me chocolate as a gift' for correct word order.

× Yes, I often eat a chocolate when I was a kid umm because it had a sweet taste and every cake and candy has a chocolate flavors.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid umm because it had a sweet taste and every cake and candy had chocolate flavors.

The sentence mixes present tense 'eat' with past time 'when I was a kid'. The verb should be in past tense 'ate' to match the time frame. Also, 'a chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is uncountable here. 'Every cake and candy has a chocolate flavors' is incorrect because 'flavors' is plural but 'a' is singular; it should be 'had chocolate flavors' to maintain past tense and correct plural usage.

× I think chocolate is popular around the world because it has a really good flavor with a sweet and a little bitter and chocolate is a common flavors in a dessert.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because it has a really good flavor that is sweet and a little bitter, and chocolate is a common flavor in desserts.

The phrase 'with a sweet and a little bitter' is awkward; it should be 'that is sweet and a little bitter' to describe the flavor properly. 'Chocolate is a common flavors' is incorrect because 'flavors' is plural but 'a' is singular; it should be 'a common flavor'. Also, 'in a dessert' should be 'in desserts' to generalize the statement.

× Even I don't like chocolate, but my favorite flavor of chocolate is that is when chocolate mix with a lot of milk.

✓ Even though I don't like chocolate, my favorite flavor of chocolate is when chocolate is mixed with a lot of milk.

The phrase 'Even I don't like chocolate, but' is incorrect; 'Even though' is the correct conjunction to express contrast without using 'but'. Also, 'that is when chocolate mix' is incorrect; it should be 'when chocolate is mixed' to use passive voice and correct verb form.

× Umm, I don't like a original chocolate because it's too bitter for me.

✓ Umm, I don't like original chocolate because it's too bitter for me.

The article 'a' before 'original chocolate' is incorrect because 'original chocolate' is uncountable or a general concept here. The article should be omitted.

× Personally I think chocolate is as a gift is a good option especially for the people really into eating chocolate because chocolate flavor is smooth creamy taste.

✓ Personally, I think chocolate as a gift is a good option especially for people who are really into eating chocolate because chocolate flavor has a smooth, creamy taste.

The phrase 'chocolate is as a gift' is incorrect; it should be 'chocolate as a gift'. Also, 'the people really into eating chocolate' needs 'who are' to be grammatically correct. 'Chocolate flavor is smooth creamy taste' is missing the verb 'has' and needs a comma between 'smooth' and 'creamy'.

× So people will happy.

✓ So people will be happy.

The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb 'be' to form the future tense. 'Happy' is an adjective and cannot stand alone after 'will'. The correct form is 'will be happy'.