Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and make your answer more fluent and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate, because its rich taste helps me refresh my mind while studying.

提案: Avoid repeating phrases and try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I usually eat dark chocolate whenever I am studying or working because it helps me stay focused and enjoy my tasks.

提案: Try to complete your sentences and avoid hesitation. Use specific details and organize your answer logically with linking words.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid. I especially loved Dairy Milk chocolate because it was very sweet and delicious, and I have fond memories of enjoying it during my childhood.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Provide more specific reasons and use linking words to explain your ideas clearly.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy its sweet and rich taste, and it is often associated with happiness and celebration.

提案: Avoid incomplete sentences and clarify your ideas. Use appropriate vocabulary and linking words to express your preference clearly.

例: My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because I enjoy the strong cocoa taste, which is richer and less sweet than other types.

提案: Complete your sentences and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly and keep your answer concise.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because most people love it, and giving chocolate can make others feel appreciated and closer to you.

× Because of every people feel that taste, that's why chocolate are favorite in the world.

✓ Because every person feels that taste, that's why chocolate is a favorite in the world.

The phrase 'every people' is incorrect; 'every' should be followed by a singular noun, so 'every person' is correct. Also, 'chocolate are' is wrong because 'chocolate' is singular, so it should be 'chocolate is'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× Every people love chocolate and when we will give chocolate others that and they feel really closer to the other person and they feel really good and.

✓ Every person loves chocolate, and when we give chocolate to others, they feel really close to the other person and feel really good.

'Every people' should be 'Every person' because 'every' is used with singular nouns. Also, 'love' should be 'loves' to agree with singular subject. 'Give chocolate others' is missing the preposition 'to'. This is a singular and plural issue combined with preposition usage.

× When I do study or I'm working that time I take dark chocolate and take dark chocolate and I really enjoy that time for dark chocolate.

✓ When I study or work, I take dark chocolate and really enjoy it at that time.

The phrase 'enjoy that time for dark chocolate' is awkward and incorrect. The preposition 'for' is misused here. The correct expression is 'enjoy it at that time'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions issue.

× Yes, of course it's it's my childhood. When I was child that time I really I was really chocolate lover.

✓ Yes, of course, it's my childhood. When I was a child, I was really a chocolate lover.

'When I was child' is missing the article 'a' before 'child'. Also, 'chocolate lover' needs an article 'a'. This is a singular and plural issue related to article usage.

× I want you to do the correction under following 5 steps:

✓ I want you to do the correction using the following 5 steps:

The phrase 'under following 5 steps' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'using' or 'by following'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions issue.