Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and clear. Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of "since my childhood until today," say "since my childhood." Also, avoid unclear phrases like "Remember Me, my sweet childhood."

例: Yes, I have liked eating chocolate since my childhood because it makes me happy and reminds me of good memories. I think many people love chocolate because of its sweet taste.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Try to give a clear frequency and explain your preference with complete sentences. Avoid filler words like "uh" and unclear phrases like "Past 30."

例: I usually eat chocolate twice a day, especially when I have coffee. I enjoy this combination because the flavors complement each other perfectly.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear word choice. Instead of "hilarious," use "fun" or "enjoyable." Also, try to use a clear structure with a topic sentence and supporting details.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because I found it very enjoyable. Eating chocolate made me happy and was a special treat for me.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and lacks coherence. Use linking words and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, correct grammar mistakes like "it's a delicious" should be "it's delicious."

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and many people enjoy it. Additionally, it is available in many varieties, which appeals to different tastes.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like "I definitely in your situation." Try to give a clear opinion and explain it with supporting details.

例: Honestly, I like all kinds of chocolate, so I don't have a favorite flavor. I enjoy trying different types, whether it's milk, dark, or white chocolate.

提案: Your answer has grammar errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use complete sentences and avoid unnecessary words. For example, say "Yes, it's a good idea because chocolate is popular and enjoyed by many people."

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift because it is popular and liked by many people. Giving chocolate can make others happy.

× Yes, I do like eating chocolate since my childhood until today because it makes me happy and Remember Me, my sweet childhood, so it is very tasty for me.

✓ Yes, I have liked eating chocolate since my childhood until today because it makes me happy and reminds me of my sweet childhood, so it is very tasty for me.

The sentence uses 'do like' with 'since my childhood until today', which requires present perfect tense to indicate an action continuing from the past to the present. Also, 'Remember Me' should be 'reminds me' to correctly express the idea.

× I think chocolates everyone loves.

✓ I think everyone loves chocolate.

The original sentence incorrectly places 'chocolates' and 'everyone' together without proper structure. 'Everyone' is singular and should be followed by a singular noun 'chocolate' in this context.

× Maybe twice today when I eat coffee.

✓ Maybe twice a day when I drink coffee.

The phrase 'twice today' is incorrect for habitual action; 'twice a day' is appropriate. Also, 'eat coffee' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'drink' for coffee.

× This combo is perfect for me because it's uh. Past 30.

✓ This combo is perfect for me because it's, uh, past 30.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Past 30' is ambiguous and should be clarified or removed. The filler 'uh' should be separated by commas.

× Yes, I was eating chocolate when I was a child and because it was hilarious for me, it was really a good thing.

✓ Yes, I ate chocolate when I was a child because it was enjoyable for me; it was really a good thing.

The past continuous 'was eating' is unnecessary here; simple past 'ate' is better for habitual past action. 'Hilarious' is incorrect in this context; 'enjoyable' or 'fun' is appropriate.

× I think because of it's a delicious, tasty, everyone loves it.

✓ I think it's delicious and tasty; everyone loves it.

The phrase 'because of it's a delicious, tasty' is grammatically incorrect. 'Because of' should be followed by a noun, not a clause. Also, 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is' and should be used properly.

× It will be just chocolate and I definitely in your situation.

✓ It will just be chocolate, and I definitely understand your situation.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'I definitely in your situation' lacks a verb; adding 'understand' clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, why not it?

✓ Yes, why not?

The phrase 'why not it?' is incorrect; the correct expression is simply 'why not?' without the pronoun 'it'.

× So I think it it will be great gift. To give someone.

✓ So I think it will be a great gift to give someone.

The sentence has repetition 'it it' and is fragmented. Combining the fragments into one sentence and adding the article 'a' before 'great gift' corrects the structure.