Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и некоторые фразы неясны. Рекомендуется использовать простые и правильные предложения, избегать повторов и неясных выражений. Также стоит ограничиться 3-4 предложениями, чтобы ответ был более естественным и понятным.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it gives me pleasure. I think chocolate is a great snack since it satisfies hunger and tastes delicious. I enjoy all types of chocolate, including dark, milk, and white.

提案: В ответе есть грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать правильные времена и более четко выражать мысли. Также стоит использовать связующие слова для логичности и избегать излишней длины.

例: I used to eat chocolate infrequently because it caused me breakouts. However, now I eat it more often because it makes me happy and improves my day.

提案: Ответ содержит некоторые ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Рекомендуется использовать более точные формулировки и связующие слова для плавности речи. Также стоит избегать лишних слов и фраз.

例: When I was a child, I didn't eat chocolate often because I didn't like it much. However, over time, I started to enjoy its taste more and now I love all kinds of chocolate.

提案: Ответ хороший, но содержит грамматические ошибки и немного нечеткие выражения. Рекомендуется использовать правильные формы слов и связующие слова для улучшения связности и точности.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it comes in many forms. For example, some people enjoy hot chocolate as a drink, while others eat chocolate bars daily because it brings them pleasure.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и немного нечеткие выражения. Рекомендуется использовать более точные и полные предложения, а также избегать повторов.

例: My favorite flavor is white chocolate because it is rich, milky, and has a unique taste that other chocolates don't have.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать более ясные и правильные предложения, а также избегать противоречивых утверждений без объяснения.

例: I think giving chocolate is usually a good idea because it can be a small gift or part of a larger present. However, some people may not like chocolate, so it's important to know the recipient's preferences.

× Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it give me pleasure.

✓ Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it gives me pleasure.

The verb 'give' should be in the third person singular form 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× In my opinion chocolate is the best snack because it's not only satisfies hunger but also gives pleasure than eating it.

✓ In my opinion, chocolate is the best snack because it not only satisfies hunger but also gives pleasure when eating it.

The phrase 'not only satisfies' should be 'not only satisfies' without 'it's' and the conjunction 'than' is incorrect here; 'when' fits better to express the idea of pleasure from eating chocolate.

× I love chocolates in any form dark milk, white and even with feeding but I drew not to have rain so as.

✓ I love chocolates in any form: dark, milk, white, and even with fillings, but I try not to have too much.

The original sentence is unclear and contains nonsensical phrases like 'feeding' and 'drew not to have rain so as'. It is corrected to a clear sentence listing chocolate types and expressing moderation.

× I use it to eat chocolate infrequently because it would cause me breakouts, but now I starting eating chocolate more often because it really gives me a lot of pleasure with make my day better.

✓ I eat chocolate infrequently because it would cause me breakouts, but now I am starting to eat chocolate more often because it really gives me a lot of pleasure and makes my day better.

The phrase 'I use it to eat chocolate' is incorrect; 'I eat chocolate' is correct. 'I starting eating' should be 'I am starting to eat'. Also, 'with make my day better' should be 'and makes my day better' to connect ideas properly.

× Then I was a child. I didn't eat chocolate very often because I didn't like it very much. But over time I began to like the taste of chocolate more and more, and now I love our form and type of chocolate.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't eat chocolate very often because I didn't like it very much. But over time, I began to like the taste of chocolate more and more, and now I love all forms and types of chocolate.

'Then I was a child' is better expressed as 'When I was a child'. 'Our form and type' is incorrect; it should be 'all forms and types' to indicate variety.

× Personally I think that chocolate is popular all over the world because it has many form and also many people can eat chocolate in different way.

✓ Personally, I think that chocolate is popular all over the world because it has many forms and also many people can eat chocolate in different ways.

'Many form' should be 'many forms' (plural). 'Different way' should be 'different ways' (plural) to agree with 'many people'.

× Some people like hot chocolate also a drink and some eating a chocolate bar every day because it just gives pleasure.

✓ Some people like hot chocolate as a drink, and some eat a chocolate bar every day because it just gives pleasure.

'Also a drink' should be 'as a drink'. 'Some eating' should be 'some eat' to maintain correct verb form.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is white chocolate because it has a rich, Milky, tasty and also has a flavor that offer chocolate flavors don't have.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is white chocolate because it is rich, milky, tasty, and also has a flavor that other chocolate flavors don't have.

Adjectives should be in lowercase unless proper nouns. 'Has a rich, Milky, tasty' should be 'is rich, milky, tasty'. 'Offer' should be 'other' to indicate comparison.

× It seems to me that giving chocolate is always appropriate because it can be used as a small present and you can also make some kind of composition from chocolate and give it as a main gift. Many will not be happy because not everything loves chocolate.

✓ It seems to me that giving chocolate is always appropriate because it can be used as a small present, and you can also make some kind of composition from chocolate and give it as a main gift. Many people will not be happy because not everyone loves chocolate.

'Many will not be happy' is vague; 'Many people' is clearer. 'Not everything loves chocolate' is incorrect; 'not everyone loves chocolate' is correct when referring to people.