Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating your preference and giving a clear reason with supporting details. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate, especially coconut-flavored chocolate because it tastes delicious. Whenever I eat it, I feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly with a clear frequency and explain why you eat chocolate at those times. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I usually eat chocolate occasionally, especially when I visit chocolate shops or during festivals. I enjoy it because it makes me feel comfortable and happy.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and clarity issues. Try to respond directly and provide a specific example with proper linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because it made me feel happy. For example, I remember eating chocolate at my friend's birthday parties.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to clearly explain the reasons for chocolate's popularity using specific details and avoid redundancy.

例: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and appeals to many people, especially children, who enjoy its sweet flavor and attractive appearance.

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to describe your favorite flavor with specific reasons and use natural expressions.

例: My favorite flavor is coconut chocolate because it tastes delicious and looks appealing. Since it's quite expensive, I usually enjoy it only on special occasions.

提案: Your answer is unclear and confusing. Try to clearly express your opinion with reasons and examples. Use simple and correct sentences to make your point understandable.

例: I don't think chocolate is always a good gift because there are many other options. Sometimes, giving chocolate as a small gift is fine, but other times, people might prefer something more personal.

× I'll specially I like coconut chocolate because it is very delicious and tastefully.

✓ Especially, I like coconut chocolate because it is very delicious and tasteful.

The adverb 'specially' is incorrectly placed and used. The correct adverb here is 'especially' to emphasize preference. Also, 'tastefully' is an adverb but the sentence requires the adjective 'tasteful' to describe the chocolate.

× I remember when I eat I feel very happy and comfortable.

✓ I remember when I ate it, I felt very happy and comfortable.

The sentence refers to a past memory, so past tense verbs 'ate' and 'felt' should be used instead of present tense 'eat' and 'feel'.

× Lastly I eat.

✓ Lastly, I eat it.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'it' clarifies the object, and a comma after 'Lastly' improves readability.

× If sometimes I eat chocolate when I go to shop of chocolate and especially on the acai and festivals I enjoy, I like very much to eat chocolate because it is very comfortable.

✓ Sometimes I eat chocolate when I go to a chocolate shop, and especially during the holidays and festivals, I enjoy it. I like eating chocolate very much because it is very comforting.

The sentence has incorrect use of 'If' and awkward phrasing. 'If' is unnecessary here. 'Shop of chocolate' should be 'chocolate shop'. 'Acai' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'holidays'. The sentence is split for clarity and corrected for natural expression.

× I thought I often eat chocolate when I was a kid.

✓ I think I often ate chocolate when I was a kid.

The verb 'thought' is past tense but the sentence expresses a current belief, so 'think' is appropriate. Also, 'eat' should be past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was a kid'.

× It I think I feel very comfortable and happy when I eat chocolate.

✓ I think I feel very comfortable and happy when I eat chocolate.

The pronoun 'It' at the beginning is unnecessary and incorrect here, so it should be removed.

× For instance, I remember in the birthday party of my friend of I've eat chocolate.

✓ For instance, I remember eating chocolate at my friend's birthday party.

The phrase 'in the birthday party of my friend' is awkward; 'at my friend's birthday party' is correct. Also, 'I've eat' is incorrect; 'eating' fits better here.

× It is only due there due to his due to it taste and delicious.

✓ It is only due to its taste and deliciousness.

The phrase is repetitive and uses incorrect pronouns 'there' and 'his'. 'Its' is the correct possessive pronoun referring to chocolate. 'Deliciousness' is a noun form to match 'taste'.

× I all get majority of kids like it because they look like very well and it also very delicious in taste.

✓ I think the majority of kids like it because it looks very good and is also very delicious.

'I all get' is incorrect; 'I think' is appropriate. 'They look like very well' is incorrect; 'it looks very good' is correct since 'it' refers to chocolate. Added 'is' before 'also very delicious' for correct verb usage.

× It also look like very well and organized.

✓ It also looks very good and appealing.

'Look like very well' is incorrect; 'looks very good' is correct. 'Organized' is not appropriate to describe chocolate; 'appealing' fits better.

× Basically it is very expensive and I eat in some special event.

✓ Basically, it is very expensive and I eat it on some special occasions.

'Eat in some special event' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' for events or occasions. Also, 'occasions' is plural for generality.

× No, I don't think chocolate is good to give give to other because there are many opportunities have to as compared to chocolate to give for other chocolate it's give give give to friend in small entry.

✓ No, I don't think chocolate is a good gift to give to others because there are many better options than chocolate to give to friends in small amounts.

The sentence is confusing with repeated words and incorrect pronouns. 'Give give' is a repetition error. 'Other' should be 'others'. 'Opportunities have to as compared to chocolate' is unclear; rephrased for clarity. 'Small entry' is incorrect; 'small amounts' is appropriate.