Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并注意时态和词汇的准确使用。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and makes me feel relaxed and happy.

提案: 回答中有重复表达且语法错误较多，建议使用简洁明了的句子，避免重复，并注意词汇的正确使用。

例: I eat chocolate once a day because it helps me relieve anxiety and feel happy.

提案: 回答中时态混乱且表达不清晰，建议使用过去时态描述过去的习惯，并避免重复和语法错误。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because my mom gave me some to calm me down when I cried.

提案: 回答思路清晰，但表达略显重复，建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并丰富细节。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and helps people relieve stress by satisfying their sweet cravings.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然，建议注意冠词使用和词汇搭配，使表达更准确。

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is not too sweet and has a rich milky taste.

提案: 回答中表达不够连贯，建议使用连接词改善句子结构，并避免重复和语法错误。

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift because it is practical and can bring happiness to people when they eat it.

× Oh I very like eating chocolate because chocolate is so sweet that I feel very relaxed and a sense of happiness failed me fills me when I eat chocolate.

✓ Oh I like eating chocolate very much because chocolate is so sweet that I feel very relaxed and a sense of happiness fills me when I eat chocolate.

副词“very”放置位置错误，应该放在动词“like”后面形成固定搭配“like ... very much”。此外，句中“failed me fills me”表达混乱，应改为“fills me”。

× Oh, I eat chocolate once a day because I really like eating chocolate because when I am straightforward, eating chocolate can release my anxious and makes me feel happy.

✓ Oh, I eat chocolate once a day because I really like eating chocolate because when I am anxious, eating chocolate can relieve my anxiety and make me feel happy.

“when I am straightforward”表达错误，应为“when I am anxious”。“release my anxious”搭配错误，应为“relieve my anxiety”。动词“makes”应与前面的“eating chocolate”保持一致，改为“make”。

× Uh, yes, I often eat chocolate when I was a kid because my mom told me when I was a kid.

✓ Uh, yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because my mom told me when I was a kid.

描述过去习惯时，动词应使用过去式“ate”而非现在式“eat”。

× I often cried and she would give me some chocolate when I ate them ate them, I was quiet.

✓ I often cried and she would give me some chocolate. When I ate them, I was quiet.

句子结构混乱，重复“ate them”应删除。句子应分为两句，保持时态一致。

× On the one hand, chocolate tastes so good and people are very stressful nowadays, so they need to taste something sweet, so that's why chocolate is very popular.

✓ On the one hand, chocolate tastes so good and people are under a lot of stress nowadays, so they need to taste something sweet. That's why chocolate is very popular.

“people are very stressful”表达错误，应为“people are under a lot of stress”或“people feel stressed”。

× Uh is Milky chocolate because it is not very sweet and I can taste a sense of milk favored in it.

✓ Uh, it is milky chocolate because it is not very sweet and I can taste a milky flavor in it.

“Milky”应小写且作为形容词使用。短语“a sense of milk favored”表达不自然，应改为“a milky flavor”。

× Uh, yes, it because chocolate is very practical.

✓ Uh, yes, it is because chocolate is very practical.

缺少动词“is”，导致句子结构不完整。

× Uh, yes, it because chocolate is very practical. Uh, people can eat them instead of like those books or some toys just to watch them.

✓ Uh, yes, it is because chocolate is very practical. Uh, people can eat it instead of just looking at those books or some toys.

“them”指代不明确，应改为“it”指代“chocolate”。“instead of like”搭配错误，应为“instead of just”。

× And eating chocolates also can bring them happiness.

✓ And eating chocolate can also bring happiness to them.

“eating chocolates”应为不可数名词“eating chocolate”。“bring them happiness”语序不自然，改为“bring happiness to them”。