Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and lacks natural phrasing. Try to use simpler, clearer sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, provide a more balanced view or personal feeling to make it natural.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and gives me a quick energy boost. I also enjoy its sweet taste, which cheers me up during the day.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains many hesitations. Try to organize your thoughts before speaking and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh'.

例: I usually eat chocolate once a week because eating too much can be unhealthy due to the high calorie content. However, I prefer dark chocolate since it has less sugar compared to milk chocolate.

提案: Good answer with clear content and some personal details. To improve, try to use more natural expressions and avoid awkward phrasing like 'were used to give'.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child. My parents would give me chocolates as a reward whenever I did well at school or behaved nicely.

提案: Your answer is relevant but the sentence structure is awkward and unclear. Use clearer linking words and more precise vocabulary to express your ideas naturally.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because people of all ages enjoy its sweet taste. It is also a common gift on special occasions, which makes it even more popular.

提案: Your answer has good content but is a bit long and repetitive. Try to make your sentences concise and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: My favourite chocolate is Lindt milk chocolate because it has less sugar and calories. I don't like dark chocolate since it tastes bitter to me.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains many hesitations and some awkward phrasing. Try to speak more fluently and use clearer sentence structures. Avoid repeating the word 'gift' unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because many of my family and friends enjoy eating it. Compared to other presents, chocolate is a popular and thoughtful choice.

× Yes, I do like eating chocolates because it increase metabolism in my body and it also boosts the heart rate so it is really good for immune system.

✓ Yes, I do like eating chocolate because it increases metabolism in my body and it also boosts the heart rate so it is really good for the immune system.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. 'Increase' should be 'increases' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'immune system' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific system in the body.

× Yes, I do like eating chocolates because it increase metabolism in my body and it also boosts the heart rate so it is really good for immune system.

✓ Yes, I do like eating chocolate because it increases metabolism in my body and it also boosts the heart rate so it is really good for the immune system.

The verb 'increase' must be in the third person singular form 'increases' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× I prefer to eat chocolates, uh, once in a week because uh, too much chocolates also contains uh, not uh, good for me because it contains lots of calories as well.

✓ I prefer to eat chocolate, uh, once a week because, uh, too much chocolate is not good for me since it contains lots of calories as well.

'Chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. 'Once in a week' is better expressed as 'once a week'. 'Too much chocolates also contains' is incorrect; 'too much chocolate is' is correct because 'too much' is used with uncountable nouns and requires singular verb agreement.

× I prefer to eat chocolates, uh, once in a week because uh, too much chocolates also contains uh, not uh, good for me because it contains lots of calories as well.

✓ I prefer to eat chocolate, uh, once a week because, uh, too much chocolate is not good for me since it contains lots of calories as well.

The phrase 'once in a week' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'once a week' to indicate frequency.

× If it's not uh, uh, dark chocolate, uh, because dark chocolate has less sugar, but the other regular chocolate like milk chocolate and the plain.

✓ If it's not, uh, dark chocolate, because dark chocolate has less sugar, but other regular chocolates like milk chocolate and plain ones do not.

'The other regular chocolate' should be plural 'other regular chocolates' to refer to multiple types. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs restructuring for clarity.

× Yes, of course. I vividly remember that time when I was a kid, my parents were used to give me chocolates whenever I got good remarks from schools and also they gave me surprises for good deeds.

✓ Yes, of course. I vividly remember that time when I was a kid; my parents used to give me chocolates whenever I got good remarks from school, and they also gave me surprises for good deeds.

The phrase 'were used to give' is incorrect; the correct form is 'used to give' to indicate habitual past actions. 'Schools' should be singular 'school' when referring to the institution in general.

× Yes, of course. I vividly remember that time when I was a kid, my parents were used to give me chocolates whenever I got good remarks from schools and also they gave me surprises for good deeds.

✓ Yes, of course. I vividly remember that time when I was a kid; my parents used to give me chocolates whenever I got good remarks from school, and they also gave me surprises for good deeds.

The phrase 'remarks from schools' is better expressed as 'remarks from school' to refer to the institution generally.

× Well, almost every age group even though they are elderly or young people, they like to have chocolates.

✓ Well, almost every age group, whether elderly or young people, likes to have chocolate.

'Chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. Also, 'every age group' is singular and requires the verb 'likes' instead of 'like'.

× Well, almost every age group even though they are elderly or young people, they like to have chocolates.

✓ Well, almost every age group, whether elderly or young people, likes to have chocolate.

The subject 'every age group' is singular and requires the singular verb 'likes'.

× So on special occasion it is very special to give gifts as a chocolate or gestures as a chocolates.

✓ So on special occasions, it is very special to give gifts such as chocolate or gestures like chocolates.

'On special occasion' should be plural 'on special occasions'. 'Give gifts as a chocolate' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'give gifts such as chocolate'. 'Gestures as a chocolates' is incorrect; it should be 'gestures like chocolates'.

× My most favorite chocolate is Lindt milk chocolate and it contains very less sugar as well as it is not a dark chocolate because I don't like the dark chocolates they have bitter taste which I dislike and also this contains less calories as it is made.

✓ My most favorite chocolate is Lindt milk chocolate; it contains very little sugar and is not dark chocolate because I don't like dark chocolates; they have a bitter taste which I dislike, and it also contains fewer calories as it is made.

'Very less sugar' should be 'very little sugar' because 'sugar' is uncountable. 'Less calories' should be 'fewer calories' because 'calories' is countable. The sentence is long and needs punctuation for clarity.

× My most favorite chocolate is Lindt milk chocolate and it contains very less sugar as well as it is not a dark chocolate because I don't like the dark chocolates they have bitter taste which I dislike and also this contains less calories as it is made.

✓ My most favorite chocolate is Lindt milk chocolate; it contains very little sugar and is not dark chocolate because I don't like dark chocolates; they have a bitter taste which I dislike, and it also contains fewer calories as it is made.

'Very less' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'very little' for uncountable nouns like sugar.

× Yes, giving chocolates as a gift is a perfect gift because I know uh, in my all the circles of family, my family members, extended family members and friends, they all love to eat chocolate.

✓ Yes, giving chocolate as a gift is a perfect gift because I know, in all my family circles, my family members, extended family members, and friends all love to eat chocolate.

'Giving chocolates' should be 'giving chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. 'In my all the circles of family' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in all my family circles'.

× So I guess chocolates is a better gift to give somebody as compared to other stuffs like uh, food.

✓ So I guess chocolate is a better gift to give somebody compared to other stuff like food.

'Chocolates is' should be 'chocolate is' because 'chocolate' is uncountable here. 'Other stuffs' is incorrect; 'stuff' is uncountable and should not be pluralized.