Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it has a sweet and rich taste. Since I was a child, I have enjoyed buying chocolates from the market and sharing them with my friends and siblings.

提案: Focus on directly answering the question with clear and grammatically correct sentences. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words to explain your situation clearly.

例: I don't eat chocolate very often, but right now I am enjoying some because my brother sent me some as a gift. It tastes really sweet and delicious.

提案: Improve your answer by using correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because I always craved it. Also, when I went to school or met new people, they would often give me chocolate as a kind gesture, which I really appreciated.

提案: Avoid incorrect information and improve clarity. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically and provide accurate reasons for chocolate's popularity.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and delicious. Moreover, people of all ages enjoy it as it can boost mood and provide a sense of happiness.

提案: Make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repetition. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly.

例: My favourite flavour is definitely dark chocolate because I find it rich, sweet, and very delicious. I always prefer it over other types.

提案: Complete your sentences and improve clarity by using proper grammar and linking words. Provide specific cultural examples to support your answer.

例: Yes, in my country, many people give chocolate as gifts during happy occasions or when someone returns to Nepal after many years. It is considered a sweet token of love and appreciation.

× Since I was child I was always fond of eating chocolate and I went to the store or market to buy and I have a habit of sharing with my friends or any siblings.

✓ Since I was a child I was always fond of eating chocolate and I went to the store or market to buy it and I have a habit of sharing with my friends or any siblings.

The phrase 'I was child' is missing the article 'a' before 'child' which is singular and countable. Also, 'to buy' needs an object, so 'it' is added to clarify what is being bought. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I have a habit of sharing with my friends or any siblings.

✓ I have a habit of sharing with my friends or any siblings.

The preposition 'with' is correctly used here; no correction needed.

× So I like to eat chocolate because it gives me a sweet and tasty.

✓ So I like to eat chocolate because it tastes sweet and tasty.

The phrase 'gives me a sweet and tasty' is incorrect because 'sweet' and 'tasty' are adjectives describing taste, not nouns. Using 'tastes sweet and tasty' correctly describes the experience.

× Uh, I am not eating chocolate quite well, but right now I'm eating chocolate because my brother has sent sent me for of from uproot.

✓ Uh, I don't eat chocolate very often, but right now I'm eating chocolate because my brother has sent me some from Uproot.

The phrase 'I am not eating chocolate quite well' is incorrect; the intended meaning is frequency, so 'I don't eat chocolate very often' is appropriate. Also, 'has sent sent me for of from uproot' contains repeated words and incorrect prepositions; corrected to 'has sent me some from Uproot' for clarity.

× So I'm eating right now and it's really really sweet and tasty.

✓ So I'm eating right now and it's really, really sweet and tasty.

No singular/plural error here; the sentence is correct except for punctuation which is stylistic.

× Yes, most of the time. I used to eat chocolate when I was child because I'm craving it for always and when I'm going school or meeting any new people, they used to provide me a chocolate.

✓ Yes, most of the time. I used to eat chocolate when I was a child because I was always craving it and when I was going to school or meeting new people, they used to give me chocolate.

'I was child' needs the article 'a'. 'I'm craving it for always' is incorrect; past continuous or simple past 'I was always craving it' fits better. 'I'm going school' should be 'I was going to school'. 'They used to provide me a chocolate' should be 'they used to give me chocolate' as 'provide' is less common here and 'a chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is uncountable here.

× It's a sweet gesture and we really love chocolate as a kid.

✓ It's a sweet gesture and we really loved chocolate as kids.

'As a kid' should be plural 'as kids' to match 'we'. Also, past tense 'loved' fits better with 'used to' context.

× I think chocolate is popular around the world because it is really sweet and tasty and not only a child but also older people used to eat because it is also a good for increase your cholesterol and you can also gives you a good and positive vibes.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because it is really sweet and tasty, and not only children but also older people eat it because it is also good for increasing your cholesterol and it can also give you good and positive vibes.

'Not only a child' should be 'not only children' for plural. 'Used to eat' implies past habit, but here present tense 'eat' is better. 'A good for increase your cholesterol' is incorrect; should be 'good for increasing your cholesterol'. 'You can also gives' should be 'it can also give'. 'A good and positive vibes' is incorrect; 'good and positive vibes' is plural and does not need 'a'.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is definitely dark brown chocolate and I find it really sweet and tasty and delicious and I always prefer to eat and I really enjoy eating it.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is definitely dark chocolate and I find it really sweet, tasty, and delicious. I always prefer to eat it and really enjoy eating it.

'Dark brown chocolate' is redundant; 'dark chocolate' is the correct term. The sentence is long and repetitive; breaking into two sentences improves clarity. Added 'it' after 'prefer to eat' for completeness.

× Yes, in my country it is followed by many people if something is happening good or if some people are coming Nepal after many years, they used to bring chocolate to give a give it to a people for as a token of love and it's a sweet and.

✓ Yes, in my country it is followed by many people that if something good is happening or if some people are coming to Nepal after many years, they use to bring chocolate to give to people as a token of love and it's sweet.

'If something is happening good' should be 'if something good is happening'. 'People are coming Nepal' needs preposition 'to Nepal'. 'Used to bring' is past habit but context suggests present habit, so 'use to bring' or better 'usually bring'. 'Give a give it to a people' is incorrect; corrected to 'give to people'. The sentence was incomplete and awkward; corrected for clarity and grammar.