Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of saying "it's sweet and rich taste is very delicious to me," you can say "I enjoy its sweet and rich flavor." Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

例: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate because of its sweet and rich flavor. For instance, I often have a small piece after meals as a treat, which helps me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Good answer with clear frequency and reason. To improve, avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to connect sentences smoothly. Also, use more natural expressions like "satisfies my sweet tooth" instead of "satisfies my sweet taste."

例: I eat chocolate almost every day, usually a small piece after meals. For example, after dinner, I like to treat myself to chocolate because it helps me relax and satisfies my sweet tooth.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and redundancy. Use past tense consistently (e.g., "I used to eat" instead of "I will eat"). Also, avoid repeating the same idea twice. Try to make your answer more concise and natural.

例: Yes, I used to eat chocolate more often as a kid, usually two to three pieces a day. For example, I would have chocolate after every meal because I enjoyed its sweet taste and it helped me feel relaxed.

提案: Avoid unnecessary greetings like "Hi Philip" in your answer. Also, correct subject-verb agreement ("people like" not "people likes"). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating the same phrase "sweet taste" multiple times.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet and rich flavor. For example, many people enjoy a small piece after meals to relax and satisfy their sweet cravings.

提案: Good detailed answer with personal opinion and description. To improve, avoid filler words like "uh" and minor grammar mistakes such as "I enjoy is rich" should be "I enjoy its rich." Also, try to use linking words like "although" or "however" to make the answer more coherent.

例: My favorite flavor is dark chocolate because I enjoy its rich and slightly bitter taste. Although it feels intense at first, the sweetness gradually increases, creating a wonderful balance. I especially like eating it after meals as it helps me relax and satisfy my sweet cravings.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammar errors and awkward phrases. For example, "on board days" should be "on birthdays," and "considerable" should be "considered." Also, use plural forms correctly and add linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I believe chocolates make excellent gifts because they symbolize affection and bring positive feelings. For example, giving chocolates on birthdays or weddings is common and considered a thoughtful gesture. Additionally, chocolates suit many occasions and can help strengthen relationships between people.

× Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it's sweet and rich taste is very delicious to me.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because its sweet and rich taste is very delicious to me.

The possessive pronoun 'its' should be used instead of the contraction 'it's' (it is) to correctly indicate possession of the taste by chocolate.

× For example, after dinner I like to treat myself some chocolate as it helps me to feel relaxed and satisfies my sweet taste.

✓ For example, after dinner I like to treat myself to some chocolate as it helps me to feel relaxed and satisfies my sweet tooth.

The phrase 'treat myself some chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'treat myself to some chocolate'. Also, 'sweet taste' is better expressed as 'sweet tooth' when referring to craving sweets.

× Yes, I used to eat chocolates more often than now because I will eat almost two to three chocolates every day.

✓ Yes, I used to eat chocolates more often than now because I used to eat almost two to three chocolates every day.

The sentence mixes past and future tenses incorrectly. 'Will eat' should be changed to 'used to eat' to maintain past tense consistency.

× For example, I used to eat chocolates after every meal of my day because I like the sweet taste of it and help me feel relaxed.

✓ For example, I used to eat chocolates after every meal of my day because I liked the sweet taste of them and they helped me feel relaxed.

The pronouns 'it' and 'help' do not agree with the plural noun 'chocolates'. They should be 'them' and 'helped' respectively to match plural and past tense.

× Chocolates are popular around the world because of the sweet and rich taste it provides.

✓ Chocolates are popular around the world because of the sweet and rich taste they provide.

The plural subject 'Chocolates' requires the plural pronoun 'they' instead of 'it' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× For example, many people likes to eat a small amount of chocolate after their meal to feel the sweet taste of it and feel more relaxed.

✓ For example, many people like to eat a small amount of chocolate after their meal to feel the sweet taste of it and feel more relaxed.

The verb 'likes' should be 'like' to agree with the plural subject 'many people'.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because I enjoy is rich and slightly bitter taste.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because I enjoy its rich and slightly bitter taste.

The possessive pronoun 'its' is needed to correctly refer to the taste of dark chocolate.

× For examples, giving chocolate on board days or weddings is very common and is considerable as a thoughtful gesture.

✓ For example, giving chocolate on birthdays or weddings is very common and is considered a thoughtful gesture.

'For examples' should be 'For example'. 'Board days' is incorrect and should be 'birthdays'. 'Considerable' is incorrect here; 'considered' is the correct past participle form.

× Additionally, chocolates are suitable for many occasions and can help strengthen relationship between people.

✓ Additionally, chocolates are suitable for many occasions and can help strengthen relationships between people.

The noun 'relationship' should be plural 'relationships' to match the context, and 'between' is correctly used here.